A Good Advice
Friends are sweet foes,
Like overgrown, painful nails in toes.
One-day he came in red coat and green hair,
In his own views, he was always fair.
He exclaimed why I was like me,
Why I offered people, biscuits and tea?
This was the sign of foolishness and awkwardness,
My humbleness, to him, was only my backwardness.
He advised me a lot
About the world and worldly plot.
He reckoned the world was an ocean
With its salty water and mazy motion.
I was speechless and stunned,
This revelation made me turned.
I followed his advice,
Saved biscuits and tea- price.
After changing few channels on television,
He gave me again a good revision.
After getting bored, he hungrily said:
Dear, now bring me some tea and bread.
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Brajesh Kumar।12 Jan 2019.
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Corrections · 2
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Dear Sir,
I agree with your point but you don't know that friend of mine. This is a personal satire...yes, I didn't find suitable rhyming word for that.
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When you can write poetry in another language, you demonstrate proficiency! There are just a couple of lines I would have you look at. The word "mazy" probably is supposed to be lazy. The line "tea and biscuits-price" doesn't make sense to me. Maybe I missed your point or perhaps you couldn't quite find the word to fit the rhyme.
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