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Today I with my husband and his relatives went to Samara. Alexey's parents gave him tickets to the theatre as a present for the New Year. All day from 10 AM to 10 PM we spent on a journey. At first, we watched the comedy in the theatre about six men that lose their jobs and decide to create a striptease show for getting money. It was an absolutely hilarious story. Even Alexey was laughing although he doesn’t like such things. After the theatre, we went to eat but the cafe where we wanted to eat had been closed. We had to find another place for eating. While we were going to a restaurant we got cold.
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Please correct my essay.
Today, me and my husband together with his relatives went to Samara. Alexey's parents gave him tickets to the theater as a present for the New Year. All day from 10 AM to 10 PM we spent on a journey we spent the whole day, from 10 AM to 10 PM, on the journey. At first, we watched a comedy in the theater about six men that lose their jobs and decide to create a striptease show to getting money. It was an absolutely hilarious story. Even Alexey was laughing although he doesn’t like such things. After the theater, we went to eat, but the cafe where we wanted to eat had been was closed. We had to find another place for to eating. While we were going to a restaurant, we got cold.2
Please correct my essay.
Today I went with my husband Alexey and his relatives to Samara. Alexey's parents gave him tickets to the theatre as a present for the New Year. We spent all day --from 10 AM to 10 PM - there. At first, we saw a comedy in the theatre about six men who lose their jobs and decide to create a striptease show to get money. It was an absolutely hilarious story. Even Alexey laughed although he usually/normally doesn’t like such things. After the theatre, we went to eat but the cafe where we wanted to eat was closed. We had to find another place for eating. While we were going to a restaurant, we got cold.you wrote:
All day from 10 AM to 10 PM we spent on a journey.
I was not sure if you spent 12 hours IN Samara, or 12 hours GETTING to Samara.
getting to Samara:
It took us (12 hours) to get to Samara.
if it was the time you spent IN Samara:
We spent all day --from 10 AM to 10 PM - there
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Please correct my essay.
Today I with my husband, his relatives and I went to Samara. Alexey's parents gave him tickets to the theatre as a present for the New Year. We were there all day - from 10am to 10pm. First, we watched a comedy in the theatre about six men that lose their jobs and decide to create a striptease show in order to make money. It was an absolutely hilarious story. Even Alexey was laughing although he doesn’t like such things. After the theatre, we went to eat, but the cafe where we wanted to eat was closed. We had to find another place to eat. We got cold on the way to the restaurant.____________
Not bad! I gave you grammatical corrections in green, and idiomatic/stylistic suggestions in yellow. Let me know if you have any questions. Happy New Year!
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