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In many countries smoking is now illegal in public places. Do you agree or disagree? Many nations have outlawed cigarette smoking and vaping in places such as restaurants, bars, and nightclubs. This essay totally agrees with this development because passive smoking is hazardous for health, and it makes clothes reek of smoke. Smoking in public places should be banned because it involuntarily exposes non-smokers to harmful toxins found in second-hand smoke. Tobacco smoke contains many of the known carcinogens that cause cancer, lung disease, and heart problems. Inhaling these dangerous chemicals is bad not only for the smokers themselves but also for all people standing nearby. For example, a recent study in Ireland has found that those who spent more than 20 hours per week in an environment polluted with second-hand smoke were 25% more likely to have heart disease than people who did not. Another reason why public spots should be smoke free is because the clothes of visitors of such places stink of cigarettes long after they leave, which is very uncomfortable. Unless the place is aired out 24/7, which is usually unreasonable, the accumulated stench covers the whole area. Paying just a short visit to such a venue will make the visitor’s clothes stink of cigarette smoke that won’t come off on its own. When I had friends working in a shisha bar where smoking was allowed, I reeked like a chain smoker whenever I hanged out with them for just half an hour. To conclude, smoking in public spaces should be against the law because environmental tobacco smoke makes non-smokers sick and their clothing smelly.

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In many countries smoking is now illegal in public places. Do you agree or disagree?

Many nations have outlawed cigarette smoking and vaping in places such as restaurants, bars, and nightclubs. This essay totally agrees with this development because passive smoking is hazardous for health, and it makes clothes reek of smoke.

Smoking in public places should be banned because it involuntarily exposes non-smokers to the harmful toxins found in second-hand smoke. Tobacco smoke contains many of the known carcinogens that cause cancer, lung disease, and heart problems. Inhaling these dangerous chemicals is bad, not only for the smokers themselves, but also for all people standing nearby. For example, a recent study in Ireland has found that those who spent more than 20 hours per week in an environment polluted with second-hand smoke were 25% more likely to have heart disease than people who did not.

Another reason why public spots should be smoke free is because the clothes of visitors of such places stink of cigarettes long after they leave, which is very unpleasant. Unless the place is aired out 24/7, which is usually unreasonable, the accumulated stench covers the whole area. Paying just a short visit to such a venue will make the visitor’s clothes stink of cigarette smoke that won’t come out on its own. When I had friends working in a shisha bar where smoking was allowed, I reeked like a chain smoker whenever I hung out with them, even if it was for just half an hour.

To conclude, smoking in public spaces should be against the law because environmental tobacco smoke makes non-smokers sick and their clothing smelly.
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In many countries smoking is now illegal in public places. Do you agree or disagree?

Many nations have outlawed cigarette smoking and vaping in places such as restaurants, bars, and nightclubs. This essay totally agrees with this development because passive smoking is hazardous for health and it makes clothes reek of smoke.

Smoking in public places should be banned because it involuntarily exposes non-smokers to harmful toxins found in second-hand smoke that can lead to lung disease, and heart problems. Tobacco smoke contains many of the known carcinogens that cause cancer. Inhaling these dangerous chemicals is bad not only for the smokers themselves, but also for all those around them. For example, a recent study in Ireland has found that those who spent more than 20 hours per week in an environment polluted with second-hand smoke were 25% more likely to have heart disease than people who did not.

Another reason why public areas should be smoke free is because the clothes of those visiting such places continue to smell of cigarette smoke long after they leave, which is very unpleasant. Unless the place is aired out 24/7, which is usually unreasonable, the accumulated stench covers the whole area. Paying just a short visit to such a venue will make the visitor’s clothes smell of cigarette smoke that won’t come out on its own. When I had friends working in a shisha bar where smoking was allowed, I reeked like a chain smoker whenever I hung out with them for just half an hour.

To conclude, smoking in public spaces should be against the law because environmental tobacco smoke makes non-smokers sick and their clothing smelly.

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