Could you help me to correct the article about the oversea study, thankkkkkk you!!!!!
It becomes a normal phenomenon that more and more Chinese oversea students return home, but some of them are not easy to get the satisfied high salaries as before. So someones questioned that does this mean that the value of studying abroad is reduced ？
The first question is easy to explain due to the whole environment. The modern China is definitely different from the nation in 1970s when it struggled on poverty line. Nowadays, whether job opportunities or life qualities, Chinese cities especially first class cities are attractive even comparing with famous Metro like Paris and Tokyo. Meanwhile, it is not easy to live in a strange country and adapt to its culture and policies for new immigrates, for which push more and more students return home.
However, some of the oversea students don't get the ideal salaries. According to me, the so-called prospect is individual. The experience of overseas study definitely has advantage and still offers them much better opportunities comparing with local students. However, the labor market is stricter than before for SOME of oversea students if they only have international educational background but lack mature professional characters. For instance, our office hired a oversea student who got the design-master degree in an Australian college but her design skill is basic and she is very shy, which is not a welcomed character for a media company. So the HR decided to offered her lower salary than another student graduated from a local university who is more lively and cheerful. It is fair. In other words, the oversea experience still has absolute advantage as before but the labor market demands for more than before.
Therefore, according to me , international study is always valuable but we should change our values: think of it as a kind of life experience but not only economic return. It offers a person a chance to open eyes and open mind to see the world, and also offers more options for future. A person might think oversea life suits him from his college career, so he tries best to stay abroad, or, another person thinks he cant stand it, so he returns home and feels satisfied more.
If we don't have options, we might think what we see is the whole world and the unchanged future.
Surely money is really important. However, study, or life is not a business. Since someone are willing to spend large money to buy a luxurious bag to make her happy, why not spend money to see the bigger world and to buy more options?
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It becomes a normal phenomenon that more and more Chinese oversea students return home.(end your sentence with a period here and continue with a new sentence) Some of them are not easy[find it difficult](I would replace with [find it difficult]) to get the [satisfied high](I'm not sure what you wanted to say here due to satisfied means: content,happy and/or proud. I also don't know if your trying to say satisfactory which means: adequate, alright, good enough and/or fair. If satisfactory was the word you are trying to use then you must choose either satisfactory or high. It can't be both. salaries as before(I would end your sentence here with salaries period(.) since we do not know what before is(as the reader I'm questioning before what?)(Hope that makes sense) So someones[someone] questioned that[what] does this mean[?] Someone questioned leaves the reader thinking who questioned? Instead you can use [This raises a question] that[Has] the value of studying abroad is[been] reduced?
The first question is easy to explain due to the whole environment. The Modern China is definitely different from the nation [it was] in [the] 1970(')s when it struggled on[through] poverty. line. Nowadays, Whether [it's] job opportunities or life qualities, Chinese cities especially first class cities are attractive even comparing with famous Metro[Cities](I don't understand what you mean by Metro the word "Cities" is the right fit) like Paris and Tokyo. Meanwhile, It is not easy to live in a strange country and adapt to its culture and policies for new immigrates, for which push[pushes] more and more students [to] return home, some of the oversea students don't get the ideal salaries too in my perspective. According to me, the so-called prospect is individual. (I'm going to safetly assume that this is coming from your perspective based on the crossed out sentence above) The experience of [an] overseas study definitely has advantage[s] and still offers them much better opportunities [when] comparing with local students. However, the labor[job](It's okay to say labor but commonly we say job) market is stricter than before for SOME[some](not sure why some was capitalized) of oversea students if[when] they only have [an] international educational background but lack mature professional character.s. For instance, our office hired a[an] oversea student who got the[a] master-design degree[masters degree in design] in an Australian college but her design skills is[are] basic and she is very shy, which is not a welcomed character for a media company. So the HR decided to offer(ed) her [a] lower salary than another student [who] graduated from a local university who is more lively and cheerful. It is fair. In other words, the oversea experience still has absolute advantage(s) as before but the labor market demands for more(.) than before. Therefore, according to me[in my perspective], international study is always valuable but we should change our values(:)[to] think of it as a kind of life experience but not only [an] economic return. It offers a person a chance to open [their] eyes and open mind to see the world, and [it] also offers more options for [their] future. A person might think oversea life suits him[them]( I don't know if this is for men or women so I'm going to assume it's for both so im generalizing the terms to make it genderless) from his[their] college career, so he[they] tries[try their] best to stay abroad, or, another person [may] think(s) he[they] can(')t stand it, so he[they] return(s) home and feel(s) satisfied more. If we don't have options, we might think what we see is the whole[a] world and the[with a] unchanged future. Surely money is really important. However, study, or life is not a business. So[If] someone are[is] willing to spend large [amounts of] money to buy a luxurious bag to make her[themselves] happy, why not spend money to see the bigger world and to buy[have] more options?
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