Two fears that you have I'm a very fearful person. I can't remember a moment of my life that I wasn't afraid of anything. I'm afraid of some animals like snakes. When I was a child I was playing in my

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Two fears that you have I'm a very fearful person. I can't remember a moment of my life that I wasn't afraid of anything. I'm afraid of some animals like snakes. When I was a child I was playing in my father's farm then I saw a snake eating a frog. It was creepy. Their poison fears me too. Just thinking about it fills me with dread. But I'm not just afraid of snakes, I have fear of heights. I used to live in a two-story house and when my brother and I went to play in the slab I just couldn't look down. Up to now I can't do it without fell a little frightned. 30-day writing challenge - (18/30)

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Two fears that you have

I'm a very timid person. I can't remember a moment of my life when I wasn't afraid of something.
I'm afraid of some animals like snakes. When I was a child playing on my father's farm I saw a snake eating a frog. It was creepy. Their poison frightens me too. Just thinking about it fills me with dread.
But I'm not just afraid of snakes, I fear heights. I used to live in a two-story house and when my brother and I went to play in the (slab?) I just couldn't look down. Still now I can't do it without fell a little frightned.

Very well written!

30-day writing challenge - (18/30)

Two fears that you have

I'm a very fearful person. I can't remember a moment of my life that when I wasn't afraid of anything.
I'm afraid of some animals like snakes. When I was a child I, was playing in my father's farm and then I saw a snake (1) swallowing eating a frog. It was creepy. Their poison (2) frightens fears me too. Just thinking about it fills me with dread.
But I'm not just afraid of snakes, I have a fear of heights too. I used to live in a two-story house and whenever my brother and I went to play in the balcony, slab I just couldn't (3) bring myself to look down. Up (4) till now, I can't do it without feeling a little frightened.

30-day writing challenge - (18/30)

Hi Aline,

I would like to provide some suggestions for your writing:

(1) I replaced your "eating" with "swallowing" as we chew our food into smaller pieces and soften it before we swallow it. Snakes do not do that; instead, they "swallow" their prey whole.

(2) You can have a "fear" (noun), or you "fear" (verb) something, but it sounds unnatural to say that something "fears" you unless you really mean that the snake's poison is afraid of you.

(3) When you say "I couldn't look down", it may have meaning that something is stopping you from looking down. I assume that it is your inner fear that is stopping you from doing so; hence, I added "bring myself to" to express this meaning.

Reference URL: https://idioms.thefreedictionary.com/bring+myself+to)

I hope this helps.

I had a classmate who is easily frightened as well, so I can empathise with what you are feeling. God bless you.

Two fears that you have

I'm a very fearful person. I can't remember a moment of my life that I wasn't afraid of anything.
I'm afraid of some animals, like snakes. When I was a child I was playing in my father's farm then I saw a snake eating a frog. It was creepy. Their poison scares me too. Just thinking about it fills me with dread.
But I'm not just afraid of snakes, I also have a fear of heights. I used to live in a two-story house and when my brother and I went to play in the slab I just couldn't look down. Up to now I can't do it without feeling a little frightened.

30-day writing challenge - (18/30)

I am not sure what you mean by slab, maybe attic?

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