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Diary on 13th Dec Now I'm looking for a place to move, and I've got a viewing yesterday in the evening. I didn't expect this at all but the viewing went in an interesting way and I had a lovely night after all. The thing I like the most in the house is that they have a fireplace in the living room. When I got arrived at the house, the landlord first let me in the living room to get warm. The evening was very cold and windy, so I was more than happy. Another great thing was that there is a girl living there, and both the landlord and the girl loves music. She plays the guitar and the piano, and he can also play the guitar, and the tin whistle! The landlord got excited when I told him I can play the whistle as well. He took out his whistle and asked me for a tune. When I was playing, the girl came back home and we three played together. Each of us played their favorite tunes one after another. The landlord opened a bottle of red wine for us. When I left the house, it was almost 11pm. I was spending more than 3 hours there! I'm not sure I'm going to take this room, but even if I didn't, I'd like to come over to them sometimes.

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Diary on 13th Dec

Now, I'm looking for a place to move into, and I've got a viewing yesterday in the evening. I didn't expect this at all but the viewing went in an interesting way (this is a little awkward perhaps another way to express this?) and I had a lovely night after all.

The thing What I like the most in the house is that they have a fireplace in the living room. When I got arrived at the house, the landlord first let led me in to the living room to get warm. The evening was very cold and windy, so I was more than happy to follow.

Another great thing was that there is a girl living there, and both the landlord and the girl loves music. She plays the guitar and the piano, and he can also play the guitar, and the tin whistle! The landlord got excited when I told him I can play the whistle as well. He took out his whistle and asked me for a tune. When I was playing, the girl came back home and we three played together. Each of us played their favorite tunes one after another. The landlord opened a bottle of red wine for us. (Not needed, but express maybe a different way or expand on this idea of the red wine. The paragraph isn't finished here.)

When I left the house, (we already know it's the house) it was almost 11pm. I was spending spent more than 3 hours there! I'm not sure I'm going to take this room, but even if I didn't, don't I'd like to come over to (to what? need something here? What are you going to do to them? ) them sometimes.

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Re-writing - - - Now, I'm looking for a place to move into, and I've got a viewing yesterday evening. I didn't expect this at all but I ended up meeting nice people and having a wonderful night with them. What I like the most in the house is that they have a fireplace in the living room. When I arrived, the landlord led me to the living room to get warm. The evening was very cold and windy, so I was more than happy to follow. Another great thing was that there is a girl living there, and both the landlord and the girl loves music. She plays the guitar and the piano, and he can also play the guitar, and the tin whistle! The landlord got excited when I told him I can play the whistle as well. He took out his whistle and asked me for a tune. When I was playing, the girl came back home and we three played together. Each of us played their favourite tunes one after another. The landlord was glad about this unexpected moment and he opened a bottle of red wine for us at the end. When I left, it was almost 11pm. I spent more than 3 hours there! I'm not sure I'm going to take this room, but even if I dont, I'd like to come over sometimes to have another session night with them.

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