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need experts help to correct my short sentences! The given line graph indicates the figure of daily visits to the History Museum and Amusement park in Grenby for one week. Overall, it is clear that the statistic of Grenby History Museum was always lower than its Grenby History Museum during the given period. Visits of Grenby History Museum shows a gradual increase with the peak on Saturday, While the figure of Grenby Amusement park shows a dramatic increase. There was a gradual and slight decrease in the number of visitors going to Grenby Amusement park from Monday to Thursday, which is the lowest figure it reaches for 1 week. More than 200 people went to the History Museum in Grenby from Thursday to Saturday. The figure of visitors to Amusement park was as low as those to History museum at the beginning, especially from Monday to Wednesday. Since then, there was a dramatic increase during 4 consecutive days reaching more than 700 at the peak, interestingly showing biggest gap with the statistic of visitors to History Museum during entire week.

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need experts help to correct my short sentences!

The given line graph indicates the figure of daily visits to the History Museum and Amusement park in Grenby for one week. Overall, it is clear that the statistic of Grenby History Museum -should this be the Amusement park?- was always lower than its Grenby History Museum during the given period. Visits of Grenby History Museum shows a gradual increase with the peak on Saturday, while the figure of Grenby Amusement park shows a dramatic increase.

There was a gradual and slight decrease in the number of visitors going to Grenby Amusement park from Monday to Thursday, which is the lowest figure it reaches for 1 week. More than 200 people went to the History Museum in Grenby from Thursday to Saturday.

The figure of visitors to the Amusement park was, as low as those who visited the to History museum at the beginning, especially from Monday to Wednesday. Since then, there was a dramatic increase during 4 consecutive days reaching more than 700 at the peak, . Interestingly, showing the biggest gap with in the statistic of visitors to the History Museum during entire week.

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