The Life Circle of Salmon
The diagrams illustrate the life circle of salmon as well as the names and the features at different stages of its life.
In the very beginning, salmon eggs are laid among the stones, on which the reeds grow in upper river, where the water moves slowly. It takes around five to six months for them to grow into “fry”, with a length of 3-8cm.
Next, they travel to the lower river（fast flowing）, and then after approximately four years they turn into “smolt” , which are 12-15cm long.
After that, they continue their journey to the open sea, where they spend about five years and change into the 70-76-centimeter-longed “adult salmon”.
In the end, they make their trip back to the upper river where they lay the eggs and another life circle begins.
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The Life Circle of Salmon
The diagrams illustrate the stages of life for the salmon as well as the names and the features at different stages of its life.In the very beginning, salmon eggs are laid among the stones, on which the reeds grow in the upper river, where the water moves slowly. It takes around five to six months for them to grow into “fry”, with a length of 3-8cm. Next, they travel to the rapidly moving lower river where after approximately four years they turn into “smolt” , which are 12-15cm long. After that, they continue their journey to the open sea, where they spend about five years and develop into the 70-76-centimeter-long “adult salmon”.
In the end, they return to the upper river where they lay eggs and another cycle begins.
This is a nice descriptive essay but it is a little short, it needs to be 150 words minimum and this is 130. The writing follows a logical pattern and you correctly used the terms given in the diagram. There is good use of vocabulary and connectors.
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