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Mum once bought me a set of picture books named "Calabash Brothers". However, she asked me to finish reading one book within 10 mins. Because there are lots of new words in the books, and those nasty Pinyin drove me crazy, after the first time when it took me 45 mins to finish it, I sweared I would never never do it again. The next day, mum came in with the book, she told me I wouldn't be allowed to play minecraft if I couldn't complete reading task. Magical thing happened, I just spent 30 mins this time. The result encouraged me. I kept reading this book at the 3rd day, 4th day...Can you guess how long I cost for the 7th try? Six. I shortened the time from 45 mins to 6 mins. At that moment, I felt how strong the power of "Perserverance" is. As mum told me, "Talent is fair to everyone, hard work is all that matters for better result".
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Please help me to revise my article for a speech. Thank you.
Mum once bought me a set of picture books named "Calabash Brothers". However, she asked me to finish reading one book within 10 mins. Because there are lots of new words in the books, and those nasty Pinyin drove me crazy, after the first time when it took me 45 mins to finish it, I sweared swore I would never never do it again. The next day, mum came in with the book, she told me I wouldn't be allowed to play minecraft if I couldn't complete my reading task. Magical thing happened, I just spent 30 mins this time. The result encouraged me. I kept reading this book at on the 3rd day, 4th day...Can you guess how long I cost took for the 7th try? Six. I shortened the time from 45 mins to 6 mins. At that moment, I felt how strong the power of "Perserverance" is. As mum told me, "Talent is fair to everyone, hard work is all that matters for a better result".0
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