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Is economic progress most important or other types of development is equally important? Many governments believe that economic goal is most important to a country. While some people believe in the equal importance of other areas of progress. In my opinion, the goal of development should be stresses according to the developing level where the country is at. For the country that are still economically undeveloped like those from the ‘ The Third World ’,it is no wonder why prioritizing boost of economy is a must. As people in these world are still suffering from hunger and unreliable accommodation yet, economic prosperity can solve these problems practically and directly. As I know, sufficient food, better insured housing and developed facilities is a basis for every citizen’s right and symbol of a healthy society. Moreover, starting from the economic progression might trigger the engine of other associated sections of development, for example, better atmosphere of culture and less crime due to the increased employment. On the other hand, it is those countries that its economic progress is fairly forward might pay more attention to the balanced development of other aspects.Literally, a fully developed country requires not only their strong power of economic but also their ambition on building a healthy society for people to live in. In these cases, goals of achieving more public welfare such as less crimes, better environment, accessible and fair education resource are seemingly becoming more significant. Therefore, for those more developed world, gaining an equally stress on other areas is crucial to become challenging around the globe. In conclusion, different set of goal should depends on different situation and challenges what a country is facing.

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Is economic progress most important or are other types of development is equally important?

Many governments believe that economic goals are most important to a country, while some people believe in the equal importance of other areas of progress. In my opinion, the goal of development should be stressed (perhaps "set" would be a better word to use here) according to the country's level of development. developing level where the country is at.

For the country that are still developing economically undeveloped, like those from the ‘ The Third World ’,third world countries, it is no wonder why prioritizing boosting the of economy is a must. As people in these world countries are still suffering from hunger and unreliable accommodation yet, economic prosperity can solve these problems practically and directly. As I know, Sufficient food, better insured stable housing and developed facilities is a basis for every citizen’s right and is a symbol of a healthy society. Moreover, starting from the economic progression might trigger the engine of other associated sections of development in other areas, for example, better social atmosphere of culture and less crime due to the increased employment.

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On the other hand, it is those countries with highly developed economies that its economic progress is fairly forward might pay more attention to the balanced development of other aspects. Literally,  A fully developed country requires not only a strong economy their strong power of economic but also an ambition to build their ambition on building a healthy society for people to live in. In these cases, public welfare related goals of achieving more public welfare such as less crimes a lower crime rate (you can also say "less crime" if you prefer), better environment, accessible and fair education resources are seemingly becoming more significant. Therefore, for those more developed world countries (we only have one world, the earth, inside it are many countries), giving equal importance to gaining an equally stress on other areas is crucial to becoming a competitive nation. e challenging around the globe.

In conclusion, the priority given to different set of goals should depends on different situations and challenges what that a country is currently facing.

I tried my best to correct the sentences while keeping your meaning, I hope it is ok! :-)

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Hi Willow! I tried my best to correct your article. I had to split my correction into two notes as I had a problem with the italki website. :-) 我也有寫一篇文章,如果你有空的話可以去看看,謝謝! https://www.italki.com/notebook/3447830/entry/956183
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Do you mean there are too many mistakes?
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Hi Willow, I would have corrected this, but I "chickened out" too big and no proper structure. Help us to help you please. :-)

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