Essential devices in our daily life
Have you ever felt happy and grateful for the existence of a modern domestic appliance? I definitely have, and I must confess that there are two of them that make my life much easier.
Firstly, there's the portable charger. I don't know what I would do if it didn't exist. One of the advantages is that I can carry it anywhere I go. In addition, one of the most important things is that you don't need a plug to charge your phone when using the portable charger. Nevertheless, you must charge it first if you want to use it when you're not at home.
Subsequently, there's the microwave. This device is almost better than the portable charger even though they are not related. Honestly, it simplifies my life every time I am in a hurry. I am sure I would spend a lot of my time using the cooker, waiting for the food to heat if the microwave didn't exist. Moreover, it can heat anything and, what's best, in just a few minutes!
Of course, there are many others devices that are very useful for our day-to-day, but I think these two things are essential in our lifes. They may not be necessary for everybody, but at least, they are for me.
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For example, here's another way you could write the second paragraph:
Firstly, there's the portable charger. I don't know what I would do if it didn't exist. One of the advantages is that you can carry it anywhere you go. You also don't need a plug to charge your phone when using the portable charger, although you must charge it first if you want to use it when you're not at home.
Nice work overall!!
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We definitely have some very useful technology these days!
Your writing in English is pretty perfect grammatically (except that "lifes" should be "lives"). The main thing that I noticed when reading it is that you use a lot of connecting phrases (like 'nevertheless' and 'in addition'). It's great to use them sometimes but I found that there were so many that it sounded a bit unnatural.
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Essential devices in our daily life
Have you ever felt happy and grateful for the existence of a modern domestic appliance? I definitely have, and I must confess that there are two of them that make my life much easier.Firstly, there's the portable charger. I don't know what I would do if it didn't exist. One of the advantages is that I can carry it anywhere I go. In addition, one of the most important things is that you don't need a plug to charge your phone when using the portable charger. Nevertheless, you must charge it first if you want to use it when you're not at home.
And then again (suggestion), there's the microwave. This device is almost better than the portable charger even though they are not related. Honestly, it simplifies my life every time I am in a hurry. I am sure I would spend a lot of my time using the cooker, waiting for the food to heat if the microwave didn't exist. Moreover, it can heat anything and, what's best, in just a few minutes!
Of course, there are many others devices that are very useful for our day-to-day, but I think these two things are essential in our lives. They may not be necessary for everybody, but at least, they are for me.
Almost perfect! Very well written.
Laurence
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