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My grandfather suddenly loses conscious yesterday. Yesterday, I studied English around 11 p.m. Suddenly, My mother came to my room and said our grandfather could not stand up by himself from a bath. My grandfather is 92 years old. I rushed a bathroom. He almost loses conscious in the bath. so we had to move him a bath to his bed. and then I called an ambulance and waited. A few minutes later, Emergency Medical Technician-Paramedic came to our house and checked his temperature and his condition. Emergency Medical Technician-Paramedic said he is okay he just loses conscious because of too much taking a bath we don't need to go to a hospital immediately. If he has a bad condition at midnight we will back here quickly Emergency Medical Technician-Paramedic said. Next day, In the morning, I checked his condition through he recovered his condition. He is okay now.

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My grandfather suddenly lost consciousness yesterday.

Yesterday, I was studying English around 11 p.m. when suddenly, my mother came to my room and told me that our grandfather could not stand by himself in the bath. My grandfather is 92 years old. I rushed to the bathroom. He almost lost consciousness in the bath, so we had to move him from the bath to his bed. Then, I called an ambulance and waited.

A few minutes later, an Emergency Medical Technician-Paramedic came to our house and checked his temperature and his condition. The Emergency Medical Technician-Paramedic said that he was okay, he just lost consciousness because he was in the bath for too long. We didn't need to go to a hospital immediately. The Emergency Medical Technician-Paramedic said that if my grandfather happened to be in a bad condition again later during the night, that they would come back quickly.


The next morning I checked if he was feeling better. He is okay now.

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My grandfather suddenly loses conscious yesterday.

Yesterday, I was studying English around 11 p.m.  when suddenly, My mother came to my room and said told me that my our grandfather could not stand get up by himself from a bath. My grandfather is 92 years old. I rushed a to the bathroom. He almost losest conscious in the bath. so we had to move him from hisa bath to his bed. and Then I called an ambulance and waited.

A few minutes later, an Emergency Medical Technician-Paramedic came to our house and checked his temperature and his condition. The Emergency Medical Technician-Paramedic said he is okay he just losest consciousness because of too much taking a he was too long in the bath and we don't need to go to a hospital immediately. If he has a bad condition gets worse at midnight we will call back here quickly  the Emergency Medical Technician-Paramedic said.

The nNext day (today), In the morning, I checked his condition. through he recovered his condition. He is okay now.

Sorry: Did you study to 11 or from 11 or at 11? "I studied till 11 / I studied from 11  / I was studying at 11 ..." I will assume the latter.

I provided corrections although I may have changed the meaning that you intended. Good effort. Keep writing. "Practice makes perfect".


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sumimasen, yoshi-san. can you help me, as nihonjin, I need your help to correct my speech yesterday. please

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