correct my diary please
When I was a senior high school student,*I
met a boy like me
, who did all things in
a careful way,and
who want
ed to become stronger , day by day
. I told him we
could take the exam for the same university because of our same
interest in business
. So everyday we
work
ed hard to learn many things
in English,
math, chemistry, politics, l biology
, Computer Technology
and physics.
We
had never g
aveup,
One day after school we went to the fish shop, and through the fish glass (UNCLEAR)I saw a pair of eyes I had never seen before, At that time I knew I perhaps liked him by mistake. (better: I understood that perhaps I was mistaken to like him)
,And because of his foot ached/was hurting him, we went home by bus (we took the bus home).That night I felt bad (I didn't feel good) and told my girlfriend but nothing happened. Still....
a senior high school student - not precise, and ambiguous. Use:
When I was in high school (any of the last four years of schooling before university)
OR
When I was a senior/when I was a high school senior (last year of high school)