Search from various English teachers...
Peru flagJoel
Unit 6 - Writing Dear Tara, Hi! My name is Joel Acevedo, and I'm from Peru. I'm a university student, and I'm majoring in engineering. I'm twenty-five and I'm married with one children now. My son's name is Sebastian. I live with my family in Lima. I've also got a brother and sister. He's married and he has a daughter named Veronica. She's divorced and she has two sons named Alex and David. How about you: Where do you live? What do you do? And how big is your family? Write back soon, Joel

Corrections · 7

2

Unit 6 - Writing

Dear Tara,

Hi! My name is Joel Acevedo, and I'm from Peru. I'm a university student, and I'm majoring in engineering. I'm twenty-five and I'm married with one child now. My son's name is Sebastian. (better: I'm married and have a son, Sebastian OR I'm married with one child, Sebastian)
I live with my family in Lima. I've also got a brother and sister. My brother is married and he has a daughter named Veronica. My sister is divorced and (she) has two sons, Alex and David.
How about you: Where do you live? What do you do? And how big is your family?
Write back soon,
Joel


I just corrected the grammar and spelling.  But what is the purpose of this letter? Why is Joel writing to Tara?  The beginning of the letter (introducing himself) -- why?  is she supposed to be a pen pal?  or...?  There seems to be something missing (for example, if she is a pen-pal, and this is the first letter he has written to her, you would have an introduction and ending that would be different from what you wrote)

2

Hi Joel

Here are my corrections:

*****************

Unit 6 - Writing

Dear Tara,

Hi! My name is Joel Acevedo, and I'm from Peru. I'm a university student, and I'm majoring in engineering. I'm twenty-five and I'm married with one children now. My son's name is Sebastian.
I live with my family in Lima. I've also got a brother and sister. My brother is He's married and he has a daughter named Veronica. My sister is She's divorced and she has two sons named Alex and David.
How about you: Where do you live? What do you do? And How big is your family?
Write back soon,
Joel

**********************

0
It's good! Only one small mistake: 'one children' should say ' one child'.
0
my advise is that the text needs links words to seem more natural, to have more level.

Want to progress faster?

Join this learning community and try out free exercises!

Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!

Start Learning Today