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Toilet paper panic Journalists had reported that the price of tissue would increasingly ascend, and it was a swarm of people that dashed into the superstores to buy bags of it from images offered by the news program. At the beginning, I didn’t believe that it would affect such many people. One day,I splashed water onto my homework from my bottles in school. Lacking adequate tissue, I went to the school’s store to buy it.Much to my surprise, no one bag of it was stored by the manager. Majority of my students said their parents demand they buy a maximum of it from school. The phenomenon of tissue craze had even extended to school.

As far as I am concerned, I think I am the last person dashing to every superstore to purchase tissue. First, I don’t want to spend my own money on it because I seldom use it outsides. Besides,my uncle can provide sufficient tissue for my family because he usually import and sell it.The last but not least,I am content with my circumstances and I think our family can pay the higher price instead of snatching the opportunities that the poor need immediately. I think I will be tranquil to treat the phenomenon.

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Toilet Paper Panic

Journalists had* reported that the price of tissue would increasingly ascend increase, and it was a swarm of people that dashed into the superstores to buy bags of it from images offered by the news program* which caused a swarm of people to dash into their superstore and buy bags like the ones shown on the news. At In the beginning, I didn’t believe that it would affect such so many people. One day, however, I splashed water onto my homework from my bottles in school. Lacking adequate tissues, I went to the school’s store to buy it some. Much to my surprise, no one bag of it was stored by the manager the manager didn't even have one bag in the store. A majority of my students classmates* said their parents demanded that they buy a maximum of it as much as possible from school. The phenomenon of tissue craze (phenomenon*) had even extended to school.

As far as I am concerned, I think I am would be the last person dashing to every superstore to purchase tissues. First, I don’t want to spend my own money on it tissues because I seldom use it outsides. Besides Second, my uncle can provide sufficient enough tissues for my family because he usually imports it and sells it.The Last but not least, I am content with my circumstances and I think our my family can pay the higher price instead of snatching the opportunities something that the poor need immediately. I think I will be tranquil to treat the phenomenon respond calmly to the tissue craze (phenomenon).


*Notes:

"Had reported" = Many people classify pluperfect as an absolute-relative tense, meaning one action was completed before another action in the sentence. For example, journalists had reported that a suspect was in custody when another shooting occurred. I do not believe that your two verbs have this relationship, so I removed "had".

"and it was a swarm... news program" = I am not entirely sure of your meaning, but I believe you are trying to show a causal relationship.

"(phenomenon)" = This word is not really needed, but you could place it here if needed.

"classmates" = In an early section you said you splashed water on your homework, so I assume you are also a student. If you are a teacher, I would say, "splashed water onto my students' homework".

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