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At the outset, there are numerous reasons to explain why the migration to an urban area is a better idea, but the most obvious one lies in the fact there are more occupational opportunities in the city and it’s very convenient to live near the work place. For example, most financial related workplaces lie in the downtown of my city. If graduated students find jobs downtown*, it’s advisable to rent nearby. Thus, workplace locations play a vital role in the decision-making process.

On the other hand, some people adopt the/an opposing view and tend to believe that it is not very necessary to migrate to an urban from a rural area**. For example, some people think the air is*** clearer in the rural area and the public transportation*** can solve the commuting problem. However, they have not considered the time and the energy that is spent on transportation.

In conclusion, from what we have been discussing**** above, we can conclude that migrating to an urban area is reasonable especially when considering the occupation opportunities and commuting costs.

[* Or: "find jobs in the downtown area".

** The reason for changing "the" to "an" and "a" is because the word "the" implies there is only one such urban and rural area. But all the people deciding on such a move live in many such areas.

*** Both "air" and "transportation" are uncountable nouns, meaning they are used in singular form to represent one or more instances. Other examples of uncountable nouns are: knowledge, water, learning, research, software, stuff, intelligence, and information. For example, the word "softwares" is not a valid word in English.

**** Or: "from what we discussed above".]