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IELTS Exercise Dear Mohammad, I hope you and your family are all well. I haven’t seen you for a long time. I really miss you. I am so sorry to tell you that my child damaged your pair of headset. I apologise for that. I think that I should be more careful about other people things. I want to tell you how he did that. The headset pair was on my table when my wife was preparing the lunch for my child in the kitchen and I was sleeping in my room. He utilized that to get them . He used the chair to reach them. I thought how I could compensate you about them. Therefore, I ordered a new one for you from Amazon. They are going to deliver it to your home in 7 days. I look forward to hearing from you. My best wishes to your family. Yours sincerely, Jack Anderson

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IELTS Exercise

Dear Mohammad,

I hope you and your family are all well. I haven’t seen you for a long time. I really miss you.

I am so sorry to tell you that my child damaged your headset pair.* I apologise for that. I think that I should be more careful about other people's  things. I want to tell you how he did that. The headset pair was on my table when my wife was preparing lunch** for my child in the kitchen and I was sleeping in my room. He utilized a chair to get/reach them.

I thought how I could compensate you about them. Therefore, I ordered a new one for you from Amazon. They are going to deliver it to your home in 7 days.

I look forward to hearing from you. My best wishes to your family.

Yours sincerely,

Jack Anderson

[* Headset(s) is/are a very complicated noun to use in English. Each headset has two earpieces. Technically, a "pair of headsets" are two headsets, however it is very common to use that phrase to describe only a single headset. I've changed your text to "headset pair" which is short for "headset pair of earpieces" and what you also use later in your text. But "your pair of headsets" with the "s" added is very common and also acceptable.

** Using "the" here would be appropriate if you had previously mentioned the lunch. Example: "My wife was in the kitchen preparing [a] lunch. While she was preparing the lunch ..."

Hi Hassan!]

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There is overuse of starting each sentence in first person, "I." It is not grammatically wrong but is repetative. Such repetition can portray the writer to be egocentric or less educated sounding. It's natural to want to use "I" when you are the subject but that is where the use of transition words/phrases help to link thoughts without the overuse of "I."

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