Could you help me to correct this? Part II
He travelled for 15 days and 15 nights until arrive to the old mountains. When he reached the top, he saw and old man that was singing a sweet song. The old man said: I know why you have come for, you need this! The old man showed an old harp that seemed be playing by itself.
-What do I need to get it? Asked Jon, - Just give me that sword. Jon turned around and saw a sword embedded in a big rock. Only a true knight heart can take it out. That mission seemed be impossible to Jon because he actually wasn’t a knight. He just was a simple plebeian. The old man said, - try it, you don’t have nothing to lose!
Decided, Jon took the pommel of the sword and pull hard. Suddenly, a beam of light down on the sword and Jon couldn’t see anything. Then Jon realised that the sword where in his hands. The old man said: the harp is yours and the sword too, use the harp as a weapon and the sword as a protection.
Jon couldn’t believe his feat. While he was approaching to the kingdom, he saw the big dragon was about to attack a village. Jon took out the harp and it started playing by itself. From one moment to the next, the big dragon was lying on the grass in a deep sleep. People surprised, enchained the dragon and sent it back to the castle.
The queen, after hearing the news, wanted to meet with the brave knight. Jon was introduced with the queen and immediately he fell in love of her. However, Jon didn’t want to get marry with her without love. So, Jon proposed to teach her how to train the dragons, the queen accepted.
One year later, the dragons were as tamed that the queen could ride on them without risk. Jon and the queen professed their love each other and months after, they got married and lived happy forever.
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I haven`t corrected all. I would be happy to explain corrections I made if you ask
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Hi.
Please don`t judge me over my corrections as I am not a professional. I only have B2 level )) I`ve wanted to help )))
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Could you help me to correct this? Part II
He had travelled for 15 days and 15 nights until arrived to the an old mountains. When he reached the top, he saw and an old man that who was singing a sweet song. The old man said to the traveller: I know why you have come for, you need this! The old man showed an old harp that seemed be which was playing by itself.-What do I need to get it? Asked Jon, - Just give me that sword. Jon turned around and saw a sword embedded in a big rock. Only a knight with a true knight heart can take it out. That mission seemed be impossible to Jon because he actually wasn’t a knight. He just was a simple plebeian. The old man said, - try it, you don’t have nothing to lose!
Decided, Jon took the pommel of the sword and pull hard. Suddenly, a beam of lighted down on the sword and Jon couldn’t see anything became blind for a moment. Then Jon realised that the sword where were in his hands. The old man said: the harp is yours and the sword too, use the harp as a weapon (?) and the sword as a protection.
Jon couldn’t believe his feat. While he was approaching was walking back to the kingdom, he saw the big dragon who was about to attack a the village. Jon took out the his harp and it started to playing by itself. From one moment to the next, the big dragon was lying fell asleep on the grass. in a deep sleep. People were surprised, they enchained chained up the dragon and sent it back to the a castle.
The Queen, after she had heard hearing the news, wanted to meet with the brave knight. Jon was introduced with to the Queen and immediately he fell in love of with her. However, Jon didn’t want to get marryied with her without love. So, Jon proposed to teach her how to train the dragons, the queen accepted.
One year later, the dragons were as tamed that the queen could ride on them without risk. Jon and the queen professed their love each other and months after, they got married and lived happy forever.
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