A Little Trip to HsinChu
(1) Yesterday
, I took a little trip
in to HsinChu with my mate
. We woke up early and took the train at 8:57 a
.m.
Because (2) We are / Both of us are all prone to motion sickness, have carsick so we ate a took some medication to prevent motion sickness; however, medicine it makes made us feel drowsy. tired We fell asleep (2) every time when we were on the a train or bus. we all in sleep quickly
HsinChu is a slowly slow-paced city. We really like the city here and the seafood there is fresh, delicious and cheap. I think we will go there visit Hsinchu again at soon.
Hi Carol,
I have been there and I like the place too.
Just some suggestions for your writing:
(1) We use a comma (,) to separate an introductory phrase (e.g. With this in mind, / Having said that, / On the other hand, ) or introductory adverb (e.g. Yesterday) from the rest of the sentence.
(2) You mentioned "with my mate" which means that there are only two of you. Therefore, using "We are" or "Both of us" is more appropriate. "all" gives the impression of more than two.
(3) Although "everytime" is now very common in written English, it is actually two separate words (every time).
I hope this helps.