Komezuka(rice mound) in Kumamoto prefecture in Japan
Komezuka is also called AsoFuji.
The mountain's hight is just 80m, but It's a tiny volcano.
I learned the shape was created after pouring rice to the ground from the sky by God when I was a junior high school.
The top of the mountain has a dent, and it was adorable.
I recommend that you will come here in the summer.
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(1) Komezuka (rice mound) in Kumamoto Prefecture, Japan (1a)
Komezuka is also called AsoFuji.The mountain's hight is (2) has an elevation of just (949m?) 80m, but it's a tiny volcano.
I have learned a myth which suggests that its shape was created by God who poured rice to (3) on the ground from the sky by God when I was a junior in a high school.
The top of the mountain has a dent, and it was (4) looks adorable.
I recommend that you will come here in the summer.
Hi Maki,
Thank you for sharing about this volcano, and I was excited to read your post as I have planned to visit Kyushu in March next year. So far, I have been reading up on places to visit in the Fukuoka, Kumamoto and Kagoshima areas and I have not come across Komezuka. So as you can see, I am glad to read about it.
Just some comments about your writing:
(1) This is the title of your writing. There are different styles of capitalising titles. In general, we capitalise the first letter of each word, with the exception of articles (e.g. a, an, the), prepositions (e.g. of, on, for) and coordinating conjunctions (e.g. and, but). If a preposition or article happens to be the first or last word of a title, we capitalise the first letter too.
(1a) We can zoom out from a specific town or city to the area/state/province/prefecture, and finally to the country. Example: Shatin, New Territories, Hong Kong / Flint, MI, USA / Aso, Kumamoto Prefecture, Japan. Do note that commas are used for clarity. For example, New York City New York would be confusing, but New York City, NY would be easily understood.
(2) We often use the word "elevation" to describe the height of natural geographical features such as mountains, hills and in aviation. I checked the elevation of Komezuka on Google and it is reported to be 949 metres (https://www.google.com.sg/search?q=komezuka&oq=Komezuka&aqs=chrome.0.0l6.2162j0j8&sourceid=chrome&ie=UTF-8). Therefore, I took the liberty to modify your sentence.
(3) We use the preposition "on" here as it expresses the meaning of depositing something on a surface. Examples: I spilled some water ON the floor. / The brilliant sunrays shone ON the Earth. / I placed my bag neatly ON the shelf.
(4) As the mountain is still there, the use of "was" (past tense) is incorrect. I also decided to use "looks" to express the meaning of something or someone's physical appearance and how you feel about it. Examples: This man looks very handsome! / This building looks eerily abandoned.
I hope this helps you.
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It's easier than climbing Mount Fuji, but we can't climb there now to prevent to invade by people.
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Wow, that looks like a cool place to go! It must be easier to climb than Mount Fuji.
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