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Essay on obesity Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. One of the most debatable issues of the last century has been the extent to which the authority is responsible for the increase of overweight among adolescent and to which the parents are. The essay will first look at the opinion that the government should be blamed for this problem. Then the essay discusses the different opinion which states that the aforementioned problem is due to the parents inattention and inaction. In the last paragraph, the essay formulates my own position on this question. There is an opinion that the guilty for the fact that children nowadays often suffer from the extra weight fully lies on the government. It is claimed that the government does not spend enough time and budget on launching and supporting programs for children who have problems with overweight. For example, in Russia, there is a great number of pupils in elementary classes who weight too much for their age but our government does nothing with this. On the other side, some argue that the main responsibility for childhood obesity lies on their parents. A certain portion of the population believes that the parents allow their children to frequently eat in fast food restaurants such as Macdonalds, KFC and this leads to the growth in the amount of children suffered of overweight. For instance, my parents have never forbidden me to eat hamburgers when I was young, as a result, I weight one hundred kilograms. In conclusion, there is a serious problem with a rapidly growing number of children who has obesity. From my point of view, this problem should be mainly solved by the parents in the individual order.

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Essay on obesity

Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

One of the most debatable issues of the last century has been how much of a share the state and parents have for the increase in obesity among adolescents. This essay will first look at the government's share.
Then the essay discusses the different opinion that the
aforementioned problem is due to parental inattention and inaction.
In the last paragraph, I give my own position on this question.

There is an opinion the guilt for obese children nowadays lies fully with the government.
It is claimed that the government does not spend enough time and budget on
launching and supporting programs for children who have problems with obesity.
For example, in Russia, there is a great number of pupils in elementary classes
who weight too much for their age but our government does nothing about this.

On the other side, some argue that the main responsibility for childhood obesity lies with their parents. A certain portion of the population believes that parents allow their children to frequently eat in fast food restaurants such as Macdonalds, KFC leading to the growth in children's
obesity. For instance, my parents never forbade me to eat hamburgers when I was young, and as a result, I weight one hundred kilograms.

In conclusion, there is a serious problem with the rapidly growing number of children who have obesity. From my point of view, this problem should be mainly solved by the parents of the child.*

*if I understand you correctly?

very well written!

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