Please correct my answering for to this question.

Q: Talk about a decision you made with someone's help.

I would like to talk about a decision that I made with the help of another person one year ago (This is your topic sentence, so you should make it clear that you took the decision because of someone's help, not on your own.). It was learning a foreign language, the Japanese language. I'm keen on Japanese culture and I love Japan in general, so I decided to learn this language in order to see and know how the Japanese people think. I began asking a Japanese learner on the internet on Twitter (There's no need to say "on the internet" because we know for a fact that "Twitter" is a social media site, and social media sites are online.) about how can I could start learning. She advised me to begin with the alphabets then you should buy a specific book called Genki (Genki) with some stories book (Do you mean Genki and some storybooks, or does Genki contain illustrations/drawings? If your answer is the former, then you should say, "She advised me to ... called Genki along with some storybooks." If it's the latter, then you should say, "She advised me to ... called Genki which contains illustrations.") . I took her advice and I  bought some books from Amazon. At the same time As soon as I received them, I started learning the Japanese alphabets, then I learned followed by some grammar and vocabulary / vocabulary words vocabularies from Genki book. In fact, I'm sometimes bored and I told myself why I chose to learn this language (Are you still studying Japanese? If so, it's better to say, "In fact, I'm still studying this language, and sometimes I'm / I feel bored and ask myself why I chose to learn it." Otherwise, you can just say, "In fact, I was sometimes bored ... / In fact, I sometimes felt bored and asked myself why I chose to learn this language."). However, I'm happy that I made this decision because I took steps to achieve my dream, and now I can understand some Japanese sentences.

Thanks in advance.

please correct my answering for this question

Q: Talk about a decision you made with someone help.

I would like to tell you about a decision that I made one year ago. The decision was to learn a foreign language, specifically, the Japanese language. I'm keen on Japanese culture, and I love Japan in general, so I decided to learn this language in order to see and understand how the Japanese people think. I began asking a Japanese learner [Japanese language student?] on the internet on Twitter about how I should start learning. She advised me to begin with the alphabet, and then you should buy a specific type of book (Genki) containing some stories. I took her advice and I bought some books from Amazon. At the same time I started learning the alphabet, and then I learned some grammar and vocabulary from the Genki book. In fact, I sometimes get bored, and I then remind myself why I chose to learn this language. However, I'm happy that I made this decision because I took steps to achieve my dream, and now I can understand some sentences.

thanks in advance.