I want to read something different
It's been a while since I read a novel. The last one I read was "The Green Mile" by Stephen King; a very emotive story. I felt really devasted when I finished it.
It's common to think in horror or in bloody stories when you see the author's name written on the cover of a book. But this specific story bends the rules. It does have horror content since the story begins with the murderer of a couple of little twins, and we know for that part that there is a cruel assassin. However, I think in this case, you don't read the typical horror book that only pretends to catch your attention and makes you feel scared, this time you read about the real human fear and cruelness. While reading you can feel the fear of the twins parents and the impotence of the people who help them to catch the murderer.
Until that part, you think: if the book starts with a murder maybe it will focus on solving the mystery, trying to figure out who did this. A few pages later you realize you are wrong. The police find the murderer and you suddenly are reading the part when the prisoner arrives in block E, the department in charge of executing this kind of people. And here it's when the story really begins, with John Coffee, a giant and black man that looks too innocent to be a cruel human being.
I really recommend this book, it makes you think about the human nature, the right and wrong dilemmas, the cruelness and at the same time the hope to still find honest and kind human beings.
Currently, I don't know what to read. Maybe I'll try with an old strategy, choosing randomly a book from a digital library.
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The last one I read was "The Green Mile" by Stephen King, a very emotive story. I felt really devastated when I finished it.
A comma is enough to use the 'a very emotive story' phrase to describe the book by Stephen King. "Devastated" is the correct spelling of this adjective.
It's common to think of horror or in bloody stories ....
This time, you read about the real human fear and cruelness.
To prevent your third sentence from becoming a run-on sentence, I put a period after 'scared', and started a new sentence with 'This'. I've crossed out 'the' because since 'fear' and 'cruelness' are general, universal things, in English, you don't need an article before them. I've also crossed out 'real' and 'human', because those words are redundant when describing things such as 'fear' and 'cruelness'.
...you can feel the fear of the twins' parents and the impotence of the people who help them to catch the murderer.
Technically, you are trying to say "they catch". For example, who catches the murderer? --> 'They catch the murderer'. Thus, a 'to' before catch is not necessary here.
...maybe it will focus on solving the mystery of trying to figure out who did this. A few pages later, you realize you are wrong..And here, it's when the story really begins, with John Coffee, a giant and black man that looks too innocent to be a cruel human being.
Since you are describing the mystery, you can use 'of ...." as the prepositional phrase following it to describe it so that your sentence flows better. You need to put a comma after dependent clauses such as "A few pages later" and "And here,". I've bolded "a giant and a black man" because I'm not sure how you're trying to describe this character. If you're trying to describe an African man with a big size, you can "giant, black man". If you're trying to describe a giant man who has some sort of black/dark features, it would be best to specify what those are.
I really recommend this book because it makes you think about the human nature, the right and wrong dilemmas, the cruelness and at the same time, the hope to still find honest and kind human beings.
I've added the conjonction "because" to connect your two clauses, since you are describing something of cause ('recommend this book') and reason "it makes you think about ..."). Like explained before, you don't need to an article 'the' before talking about general and universal things in English, such as human nature, right and wrong, cruelty, and hope.
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Overall, very good piece of writing! Some recommendations I have for you would be to look up some more punctuation rules and read up/learn more on conjunctions, as you seem to have a couple of run-on sentences that need to be split up into more than one sentence, and sentences with clauses that could be better connected. I hope these explanations were helpful - let me know if you have any other questions!
- Tiffany
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i just start reading this book .
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