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My TOEFL sample answer Please tell me if there are grammatical mistakes or misuse of words. The subject is that "Which do you prefer to see people in person or over social media?". Thanks! :) I personally prefer to see friends of mine in person because of the following two reasons: we can tell the nuances easily through gesture or voice tone, and various difficulties of internet communication. First, in man's communication, it's important to catch the intention of the person's words talking at the moment. When we are chatting to each other with a social app or website, we must not be able to see the face and if this is a text communication, even not be able to hear the voice. Thus catching the meaning is more difficult because of the shortage of sines to indicate someone's intention, then the communication tends to have poor quality. I was changing messages with friends 2 or 3 years ago with social network apps, but I think it might be because of my too simplified sentences, friends sometimes asked me like "are you mad to me? Why?" It was a pretty hard question for me and I've stopped to use such a way for communication. And I understood that telling the nuance of words with only sentences or without really seeing is difficult. Second, using the internet to have communication sometimes has many problems. There are a lot of people who don't have any wi-fi access in their house, and the quality may be not always stable. For example, I often try to have an English lesson with Skype, but the connection is sometimes quite bad. So I have to ask at the chat box to change the lesson time and it definitely irritates me. If the same situation occurs when I try to have a little conversation with friends of mine, it might be possible to become a cause of breaking up our friendship for the complicated way. In addition, I just like to see a friend and the smile in real and talking a whole day. Therefore, I prefer to have a communication in person.

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Yuka, I have tried again and it won't let me post the correction. It isn't over the limit of words as Lucie suggested either (thanks Lucie). I have it saved in a word file - in you want it, I can email it to you. However, if it's too late or it doesn't matter anymore, then forget about it. Have a nice day!
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Thanks for all of you!!! I really appreciable to have such a opportunity.
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Lisa, it seems to do that when the corrected text is too long. You could try dividing it into several parts and see if it works. Hope it helps. Lucie
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Hi Yuka, just to let you know I have corrected your text twice but Italki's system isn't working properly and I can't post it. I'll try again tomorrow
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your english writing is pretty good~I've learned from you

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