Wow! What an AMAZING story! You are so brave! It sounds like you're doing a brilliant job in your speaking class and it's so brave and brilliant of you to write about it on this notebook. You should be so proud of yourself, I am so impressed!
You used some EXCELLENT vocabulary and grammar! Here are my favourite words and sentences you used:
- getting worse
- nodded
- at first
- It brought tears to my eyes (SO BRILLIANT!)
- it's not a big deal
- that's why I'm here
- shy
- I don't understand how to overcome it (This is my favourite sentence! Fantastic collocation!!)
You also made a few grammar or vocabulary mistakes, which is exciting because it means you can learn something new! I've turned my corrections into questions. I hope if you answer the questions you'll be able to change the essay yourself (that way you learn much more)
1. In the first sentence. We're talking about something that started in the past and continues into the present and possibly the future, so we need to use the present perfect tense! You make the present perfect tense using subject + have + 3rd form of the verb
and it is a good to start the sentence with since instead of after.
An example that's true for my life:
Since my holiday, I've been getting really bored at work.
Can you change your sentence to make it more like mine?
2. last week's failure (fail is the verb, failure is the noun. You need the 's to show when it happened, it links them together)
3. "Today I was on another meeting with * new leader from Australia" There's a word missing where I put the star, what is it?
4. "He asked and I just nodded or say yes or no" <- you have three verbs in this sentence, two of them are excellent! One of them is in the present tense instead of the past, can you change it?
5. "At second" is not an English phrase (English is so crazy!) instead you can use "secondly" in an essay. But when you tell a story it would be more natural to use "then" "after that" or "later" <- choose, which do you like?
6. I feel a big insult <- past or present?
7. insult is when someone says something or does something rude to you. For example, I felt really insulted when my friend told me I was too fat and needed to go on a diet!
If something bad happens but the other person didn't do anything deliberatly to insult us, we say we feel hurt. For example, I felt really hurt when no one could come to my birthday party.
When you couldn't understand the Australian, did you feel insulted or hurt?
8. "I think may be speaking in * group is not for me?" where I put the star you need an extra word, do you know what it is?
9. You prepare FOR something. For example, I'm preparing for my lesson later.
Can you answer these questions and change your essay? I'd love to read it when it's finished. If you need more practice with any of this grammar or you'd like me to explain it in more detail don't be afraid to send me a message or book a lesson with me! I also have lots of advice about conversation classes. The most important thing is don't worry. It does get easier, it takes a LOT of time, everytime you try to understand someone and communicate your opinion the world becomes a bit more beautiful! So don't give up!
