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Lily~my dear,my pet~ I love small animals,especially little rabbits~ Yesterday mom bought me a baby rabbit, she is such a small and exquisite thing that I can even hold her in my hands (juse like what I did in my profile picture~), I name her Lily because I think she's just as white and pure as a lily. It's a nice name,isn't it? From the picture you could see that she is so small and spotlessly white that she looks like a little snowball, isn't she very cute? Her eyes are bright and clear just like precious rubies. This little thing is quite meek and timid. So it seems that she was scared by the flashes of the camera and she didn't like being photographed :D Lily lives in a small wooden box on the balcony and everday I feed her some carrots and cabbages--those are her favourite~But she doesn't drink any water. Maybe that's because vegetables are moisturebearing~ I love little rabbits when I was a kid cause I think they are pretty and harmless and mom often use the food habits of rabbits to encourage me to eat more vegetables,"See, you know why baby rabbits are so pretty and cute? because they like eating vegetables!" I believed in this and began to like eating vegetables. Besides, there is a very chinese famous fariy tale in which a smart baby rabbit defeated a big wolf successfully. And since I heared this fariy tale, baby rabbits hav become the top animal hero in my heart~and wolfs are bad eggs. Lily has evoked so much my childhood memories and I now I look into the mirror and find that simple, native little girl doesn't exist any more. I am a little sentimental now, Anyway,I will take good care of Lily and let her become the happiest rabbit in the world~

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u did really well. its so moving. congradulations at first. i love yr little sharp lily and u lovely girl as well. there are still some mistakes shown below:(i think) wolfs----wolves,farily----fairy,heared----heard,hav---have,etc.... and i suppose that bad egg is not a genuine native english,it seems to be a chinguish. btw,i am not a native english speaker. maybe i cant correct it well. sorry..
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Uh.....! I like vegetables too as your lily. Actually, I also love pets.But, my favorite animal is puppy.

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