A tired day
Today is a tired day.
I took part in a linguistic experiment as a test sample this moring.After wearing a special cap with more than 60 electrodes,they asked me to identify some characters and then make a judgement whether these expression were right or not.The cap is so tight that I can hardly make any facial expression.Besides,the test object need to keep relatively static and actually I didn't sleep well last night,which result in my unconcentration,and I almost fell into sleep several times while testing.
After I came back from the gym (I strengthed my muscle there),I felt I have exert all my strength,and now my body is just like a pile of mud.
My eyes ached form overuse,I spent too much time in front of the screen.So I think I need some rest now.
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A tiring tired day
Today was is a tiring day.I took part in a linguistic experiment as a test sample this morning. After wearing a special cap with more than 60 electrodes, they asked me to identify some characters and then make a judgement whether these expressions were right or not.The cap was so tight that I could can hardly make any facial expressions. Besides,the test object needed to keep relatively static/still and actually I didn't sleep well last night, which resulted in my lack of concentration unconcentration,and I almost fell into asleep several times during the test. while testing.
After I came back from the gym (I strengthen my muscles there), I felt I had have exerted all my strength, and now my body is just like a pile of mud.
My eyes ached form overuse, I spent too much time in front of the screen. So I think I need some rest now.
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A tired tiring day
Today is was a tired tiring day.I took part in a linguistic experiment as a test sample this moring morning. After wearing putting on a special cap with more than 60 electrodes, they asked me to identify some characters and then make a judgement whether these expression were right correct or not.The cap is was so tight that I can could hardly make any facial expressions. Besides, the test object need to keep relatively static required that I keep relatively still and actually I didn't sleep well last night, which resulted in my unconcentration inability to concentrate, and I almost fell into sleep asleep several times while testing.
After I came back from the gym (I strengthed strengthened my muscles there), I felt I have like I had exerted all my strength, and now my body is just like a pile of mud.
My eyes ached form from overuse. I spent too much time in front of the screen, so I think I need some rest now.
Great writing! Here are a few of my notes:
* "tired" vs. "tiring": "Tired" is a state that someone (people, animals) can be in. "Tiring" is an adjective to describe something that makes someone tired. For example, "Running is tiring. It makes me tired." is a good use of those words. But, you couldn't say, "Running is tired."
* "wearing" vs. "putting on": This is a subtle difference, but the way you phrased this sentence sounds a little weird to English speakers. "After wearing a special cap" sort of makes it sound like you wore it, and then you already took it off before the test began. "After putting on..." is more natural in this case.
Another example of this: When a woman comes home from work, she might say, "After wearing high-heels all day, my feet are tired." (She's already come home and is about to take the high-heels off). Another example of "putting on" would be, "After putting on high-heels, I feel so much taller." because she is describing how she feels now that she is wearing them.
Sorry I wrote so much here! It's really a very subtle difference.
* "right" vs. "correct": Using the word "right" is okay here, but I think it's better and little more natural to say "correct" in this case.
* "unconcentration" is not a word. I wrote the sentence as close as I could to your original sentence, but it would be even more natural to say "I didn't sleep well last night, which made it difficult to concentrate."
* "Strengthened my muscles there" sounds a little weird. I think it's a bit too obvious, because "strengthening your muscles" is generally what you do at the gym, so I feel like you're telling me something I already know. Maybe "I did strength-building exercises" would make more sense. When you phrase it this way, it sounds more like you did strength-focused exercises as opposed to stretching or running.
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