ielts writting-task 2 air pollution (correct me, please)
Some people think international cat-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
My essay:
There is no doubt that the problem of air pollution is becoming increasingly severe. People may believe an international car-free days can improve air quality efficiently, but I will argue that other policies including public transportation needs to be implemented.
On one hand, prohibiting the drivers to use their vehicles may reduce the air pollution directly since cars and motorcycles do produce massive amounts of contaminant. However, this is the most efficient way because there are a lot more factors contribute to the bad air quality, including toxic gas produced by petrochemical industry and chimneys of factories. With the industrialization of the modern society, the thorny problem becomes harder to tackle.
On the other hand, other strategies are to be implemented by the authority. One possible solution is to improve the public transportation. With more subway or bus station, commuters are encouraged to use these facilities and thus decrease the use of their own cars. Also, government should rise the standard of gas emission which force factories spend more money on filtering the air. Last but not least, more efforts should be made on the scientific research of air cleaning or reduction of pollution. This may not only create new technology that can control the damage, but also save our environment effectively.
In my opinion, the fundamental cause of air pollution is the lack of environmental awareness. One option has to be to teach everyone the importance of protecting our mother nature and raise public consciousness.
In conclusion, there are several solution to the problem of the air pollution. While it may not be possible to find a complete solution, any action should probably involve encouraging greater use of public transportation and education about environmental protection.
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ielts writting-task 2 air pollution (correct me, please)
Some people think international catcar-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
My essay:
There is no doubt that the problem of air pollution is becoming increasingly severe. People may believe an international car-free days can improve air quality efficiently, but I will argue that other policies including public transportation needs to be implemented.
On the one hand, prohibiting the drivers to use their vehicles may reduce the air pollution directly since cars and motorcycles do produce massive amounts of contaminant. However, this is the most efficient way because there are a lot more factors that contribute to the bad air quality, including toxic gas produced by petrochemical industry and chimneys of factories. With the industrialization of the modern society, the thorny problem becomes harder to tackle.
On the other hand, other strategies are to be implemented by the authority authorities. One possible solution is to improve the public transportation. With more subways or bus stations, commuters are encouraged to use these facilities and thus decrease tshethe use of their own cars. Also, government should riseraise the standard of gas emission which will forces factories to spend more money on filtering the air. Last but not least, more efforts should be made on the scientific research of air cleaning or reduction of pollution. This may not only create new technology that can control the damage, but also save our environment effectively.
In my opinion, the fundamental cause of air pollution is the lack of environmental awareness. One option has to be to teach everyone the importance of protecting our mother nature and raise public consciousness.
In conclusion, there are several solutions to the problem of the air pollution. While it may not be possible to find a complete solution, any action should probably involve encouraging greater use of public transportation and education about environmental protection.
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My essay:
On one hand, prohibiting the drivers to use their vehicles may reduce the air pollution directly since cars and motorcycles do produce massive amounts of contaminants. However, this is [not] the most efficient way because there are a lot more factors that contribute to the bad air quality, including toxic gas produced production by the petrochemical industry and by chimneys of factories. With the industrialization of the modern society, the thorny problem becomes harder to tackle.
On the other hand, other strategies are to should be implemented by the authority. One possible solution is to improve the public transportation. With more subways or and bus stations, commuters are encouraged to use these facilities and thus decrease the use of their own cars. Also, the government should rise raise the standards of gas emissions which force factories to spend more money on filtering the air. Last but not least, more efforts should be made on the scientific research of air cleaning or and reduction of pollution. This may would not only create new technologies that can control the damage, but also save our environment effectively.
In my opinion, the fundamental cause of air pollution is the lack of environmental awareness. One option has to be is to teach everyone the importance of protecting our mother nature and raise public consciousness.
In conclusion, there are several solutions to the problem of the air pollution. While it may not be possible to find a complete solution, any action should probably involve encouraging greater use of public transportation and education about environmental protection.
Great job! A few notes:
* "Thorny" at the end of the first paragraph sounded really weird. Maybe a better word would be "delicate" or "complex."
* Second paragraph, first sentence: I think it might sound more natural to change "authority" to "government."
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Hi, i've made some corrections to your essay, i'm not a professional english speaker since i'm also studying english like you, but i could find some errors, let me know if i made something wrong, greetings
ielts writting-task 2 air pollution (correct me, please)
Some people think international car-free days are an effective way of reducing air pollution, others think there are some other ways.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
My essay:
There is no doubt that the problem of air pollution is becoming increasingly severe. People may believe an international car-free days (car-free day) can improve air quality efficiently, but I will argue that other policies including public transportation needs to be implemented.
On one hand, prohibiting the drivers to use their vehicles may reduce the air pollution directly since cars and motorcycles do produce massive amounts of contaminant. However, this is (not) the most efficient way because there are a lot more factors (that) contribute to the bad air quality, including toxic gas produced by petrochemical industry and chimneys of factories. With the industrialization of the modern society, the thorny problem becomes harder to tackle.
On the other hand, other strategies are to be implemented by the authority. One possible solution is to improve the public transportation. With more subway(s) or bus station(s), commuters are encouraged to use these facilities and thus decrease the use of their own cars. Also, government should rise the standard of gas emission which force factories spend more money on filtering the air. Last but not least, more efforts should be made on the scientific research of air cleaning or reduction of pollution. This may not only create new technology that can control the damage, but also save our environment effectively.
In my opinion, the fundamental cause of air pollution is the lack of environmental awareness. One option has to be to teach everyone the importance of protecting our mother nature and raise public consciousness.
In conclusion, there are several solution(s) to the problem of the air pollution. While it may not be possible to find a complete solution, any action should probably involve encouraging greater use of public transportation and education about environmental protection.
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