This The girl I like her

I found she is a quiet girl When she walked into the office, The girl she was not have many words introverted and not a  very pretty girl, but I like her, so I often try to talk with her. She was so I found out that she was cultured through chatting with her . I hope she will be my girlfriend, so I will pursue her.

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The girl  that I like

When I found her in the office, she was very quiet, reticent and even not a pretty girl. But, I like her. So, I often try to chat  her. During that time, I understood she was holding the conservative culture. Whatever, I will persuade to become my girlfriend.

This girl I that I like her

I found she is a quiet girl when she walked into the office, The girl does not have many words  much to say and is not a pretty girl , but I like her . So I often to talk with her ,I found out she was so cultured through chated chatting with her . I hope she will be my girlfriend ,so I will pursue her.

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