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My Birthday. I turned 28 yesterday! I don't know how to explain the feeling I had been dealing with lately, but now it's gone. The only thing I can say is that I felt empty, deeply empty. I decided to spend the day at my sister's house so I can enjoy my niece's and my nephew company. I also went shopping and it helped me to feel a bit better and distracted. At night, my sister asked for pizza at home and bought a cake for me. The kids were so excited playing with some balloons... it was the best part of my day. I couldn't have a better gift than spending time with them. My mom also called me, she knew I didn't want to stay at home and that something was wrong with me. A few friends remembered my birthday, just the real ones remember a date like that... even more when it matches with an unforgettable day like 11/09. Now, I'm thinking that maybe is not the fact I'm getting older that makes me feel blue, is the fact that there are some social problems in my country that are affecting me pretty much, those problems are causing me the real problems I'm facing in my life.

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My Birthday.

I turned 28 yesterday!

I don't know how to explain the feeling I had been dealing with lately, but now it's gone. The only thing I can say is that I felt empty, deeply empty. Nicely worded.

I decided to spend the day at my sister's house so I can could enjoy my niece's and my nephew nephew's company. I also went shopping and it helped me to feel a bit better and distracted. At night, my sister asked for ordered pizza at home and bought a cake for me. The kids were so excited playing with some balloons... it was the best part of my day. I couldn't have gotten a better gift than spending time with them.

My mom also called me, she knew I didn't want to stay at home and that something was wrong with me. A few friends remembered my birthday, just the real ones remember a date like that... even more when it matches with an unforgettable day like 11/09 9/11. You need to format it as Month/Day.

Now, I'm thinking that maybe is it's not the fact I'm getting older that which which sounds a little better here but not a big deal makes me feel blue,. Good place to end the sentence is It's the fact that there are some social problems in my country which are affecting me. Again we want to limit the long sentences. that are affecting me pretty much, those problems These are the things that are causing me the real problems I'm facing in my life.


Good job Luisa! Your English is getting too good... you need to slow down and let me catch up with my Spanish :)


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My Birthday.

I turned 28 yesterday!

I don't know how to explain the feeling I had been dealing with lately, but now it's gone. The only thing I can say is that I felt empty, deeply empty.

I decided to spend the day at my sister's house so I can enjoy my niece's and my nephew's company. I also went shopping and it helped me to feel a bit better and distracted. At night, my sister asked for pizza at home and bought a cake for me. The kids were so excited playing with some balloons... it was the best part of my day. I couldn't have had a better gift than spending time with them.

My mom also called me, she knew I didn't want to stay at home and that something was wrong with me. A few friends remembered my birthday, just the real ones remember a date like that... even more when it matches with an unforgettable day like 11/09.

Now, I'm thinking that maybe it is not that I'm getting older that makes me feel blue, it is that there are some social problems in my country that are affecting me pretty much, those problems are causing me the real problems I'm facing in my life.

very well written!

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I turned 28 yesterday! I don't know how to explain the feeling I had been dealing with lately, but now it's gone. The only thing I can say is that I felt empty, deeply empty. I decided to spend the day at my sister's house so I can enjoy my niece's and my nephew company. I also went shopping and it helped me to feel a bit better and distracted. At night, my sister asked for pizza at home and bought a cake for me. The kids were so excited playing with some balloons... it was the best part of my day. I couldn't have a better gift than spending time with them. My mom also called me, she knew I didn't want to stay at home and that something was wrong with me. A few friends remembered my birthday, just the real ones remember a date like that... even more when it matches with an unforgettable day like 11/09. Now, I'm thinking that maybe is not the fact I'm getting older that makes me feel blue, is the fact that there are some social problems in my country that are affecting me pretty much, those problems are causing me the real problems I'm facing in my life.

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