About Snoring

When I go to bed my mom is already asleep. sleeps already.  So, here's the problem: my mom almost snores almost every night! This means I really struggle to sleep.  brings about a great deal lacking of my sleeping time.I can sleep less than three hours a night day, which not only makes me feel exhausted but also makes me suffer from immune illness (note from corrector: what is immune illness?  Do you mean a cold?  Runny nose, cough, sneezing, feeling a little bit ill?  If so, then change immune illness to 'a cold').

There are two methods I can be used to deal with this problem condition.  The first is One is waking up my mom, the second is another is buying earplugs.  I choose the second  latter one because I don’t want to bother her.

On the other hand,instead of the followings, There is something that makes me frightened about my mom's snoring; it is a disease in  which its symptoms are identical to those my mom is experiencing  undergoing called 'Sleep Apnea'.   Sleep Apnea can may cause somebody to suddenly forget to breathe suddenly.  One of its the evident symptoms is a person's snoring being between extremely loud and then very quite quiet.  Sleep Apnea also has a negative influence on a person's quality of sleeping qualities.  Fortunately, the situation can be improved by dieting or sleeping on one’s side.

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When I go to bed,my Mom is already asleep.

However,here comes the problem - my Mom snores almost every night,which brings about a great deal of shortfall in my sleeping time.I manage to  sleep less than three hours a day,and this not only makes me feel exhausted but also results in my suffering from immune illness.

Two methods can be used to deal with this condition.One is waking up my Mom,another is buying earplugs.I choose the latter one,because I don’t want to bother her.

But what actually makes me frightened is a disease which's symptoms are identical to what my Mom is undergoing called”Sleep Apnea”.It may cause somebody to stop breathing suddenly.One of the evident symptom is snoring which  alternates between   extremely loud and extremely  quiet and it also negatively influences one's sleep quality

Fortunately,the situation can be improved by dieting or sleeping on one’s side.

About snoring

When I go to bed, my Mom sleeps is already asleep.

However, here comes a problem, that my Mom almost snores almost every night, which brings about a great deal lacking of my sleeping time (the phrase doesn't quite sound right, here are some possible options) . ---> which has a negative impact on my sleep  // which enormously reduces my sleeping time  // which creates a number of problems, such as reducing my (total) sleeping time

I can sleep less than three hours a day, and it not only makes me feel exhausted but I also suffer from immune illnesses.

Two methods can be used to deal with this condition --> There are two methods that can deal with this condition / situation. One is waking up my Mom up, another is buying earplugs.I choose the latter one, because I don’t want to bother her.

On the other hand, instead of the followings, what makes me frightened is a disease which it’s has symptoms that are identical to what my Mom has undergoing called”Sleep Apnea”. It may cause somebody forget breathing suddenly --> to suddenly forget to breath/ to suddenly stop breathing. One of the evident symptoms is irregular snoring between extremely loudly and quite very quietly snoring, and it also negatively influences on sleeping quality.

Fortunately, the situation can be improved by dieting or sleeping on one’s side.

to wake somebody up ---     I woke my mum up last night, she wasn't very happy

                                                Gary woke his friend up by throwing water on his face.