Self-Introduction :)
Please make my mistakes correction
I'm going to create my own homepage and this will be my self introduction for that.
My vocabs and expressions are limited so if there are better expressions Please swap that out or lemme know :) Thank you so much in advance!
My name is Eri who was born and raised in Kyoto, Japan. My main passion for life are trying to meet new people and challenging new things because I believe that is the way that make you feel happier and enrich your life
I have spent 24 years in Japan and after that one each year in Indonesia and Canada. And hopefully I can go many many more places and See the beautiful world.
My child hood, I was very quiet, indoor type and pretty shy. I hung out sometimes with friends but I was type of children playing game or watching TV alone almost all day long.
And I think there are 5 turning points in my life that made my life completely changed to the opposite
One things is My parents took us every year to Ski, Hiking and Traveling even though we are not well-off. and My mom is the person who always try to make time and try to make many hobbies to enhance herself.
Second thing, I have had opportunity to go overseas when I was high school student. It was music travel from school and We held a concert and did parade in Kauai island. 3 years Later I joined again as a alumni to Disney land and Nasa.
Third thing, Studying abroad and spent such a long time a month by myself in Alberta, Canada.
Fourth thing, I moved to Indonesia and live by myself.
Those experience taught me a lot of things and lesson and made introvert kids changed to active and get to know the importance to do new things for growth.
Why I made this home page, There are 3 reasons
One, This is my challenge. I would like to express myself toward many people which I have never done that much and leave memories through traveling as well as daily life
Two, I would like to share some good information. Because I have got many useful information over the internet and I believe This is give and take kinda thing, So I would like to give back to people
Three, I would like to create the place that people could learn Japanese and English (I am going to write journal both in English and Japanese) and hopefully once my Spanish getting better then Spanish too.
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Self-Introduction :)
Please correct my mistakes.I'm going to create my own homepage with this as my self introduction.
My vocabulary and expressions are limited so if there are better expressions please swap them out or let me know :) Thank you so much in advance!
My name is Eri and I was born and raised in Kyoto, Japan. My main passions for life are trying to meet new people and tackling challenging new things because I believe that this is the way to make you feel happier and enrich your life.
I spent my first 24 years in Japan and after that one year in both Indonesia and Canada. It is my desire to visit many more places and see as much of this beautiful world as I possibly can.
During my childhood, I was the very quiet indoor type and pretty shy. I hung out sometimes with friends but I was the type of child who was playing games or watching TV alone almost all day long.
Despite this I think there are 5 turning points that have completely changed my life.
Firstly my parents took us skiing, hiking and travelling every year even though we were not well-off. My mom is a person who always tries to make time to enjoy many hobbies in order to enhance herself.
Second thing, I was gifted the opportunity to go overseas when I was high school student. We held a concert and did a parade on Kauai island. 3 years later I joined again as a alumni on journeys to both Disney Land and Nasa.
The third thing was studying abroad in Alberta, Canada where I had the opportunity to enjoy and experience western culture.
After this I moved to Indonesia to live by myself.
Those experiences taught me a lot of things and the lessons learnt allowed an introverted kid to appreciate the importance of doing new things for growth.
There are three reasons why I made this homepage.
This is my challenge. I would like to express myself to many people which I have not done much of previously and leave memories through traveling as well as daily life.
Two, I would like to share some good information. Because I feel that I have skills and attributes that could benefit others I have come to feel driven to offer these to the world and hopefully ignite the change in others that I have experienced for myself.
Three, I would like to create a place that people could learn both Japanese and English (I am going to write a journal both in English and Japanese) and hopefully once my Spanish improves I will also write in Spanish.
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Thank you Gabriel for the correction!
It helped a lot to find out how I make mistakes :) Now I'm kinda your student haha
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"I'm going to create my own homepage and this will be my self introduction for that." (Change That to it)
That is more of "あれ". It is more これ. Don't memorize this; it will take time to learn the difference in English.
"My name is Eri who was born and raised in Kyoto, Japan."
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My name is Eri and I was born and raised in Kyoto, Japan. (I don't know how to explain why this is correct sorry)
"My main passion for life are trying to meet new people and challenging new things because I believe that is the way that make you feel happier and enrich your life"
My main *passions* (plural)in life are (plural) trying to meet new people *trying*/*attempting* (need a verb)challenging new things because I believe *these* (plural) are the ways that make you feel happier and enrich your life.
one each year ----> one year each
And hopefully I can go *TO* many
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I hope you'd help most people with that as well and I really enjoyed it. [emoji][emoji][emoji] Thank your for sharing your history. I'm from Brazil. I still keep my fingers crossed for we both to reach out all of ours dreams. One of my goals now is improve my English skills and reading your text I've got encouragement.
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