Hello! My name is Victoria. I'm 24 years old. I want to improve my English which I've learnd 7 years ago. Now I need a lot of practise because I want to be better and I love travelling. In June I've visited the USA and I really loved this country. We were/we have been to California (Los Angeles) and we've visited Las Vegas. I've tried a casino for the first time of my life. It was wonderful and I won money. Newcomers are lucky - that's what people say in Russia.

Next autumn I'll be traveling to New York with my friend. It will be great to find friends there to improve my English. Thanks.

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Hello! My name is Victoria, and I'm 24 years old. I want to improve my English which I started learning 7 years ago. I love to travel and I want to improve, so I need to practice again*. In June, I visited** the USA, and I really loved*** it. I was in California (Los Angeles), and we visited** Las Vegas. I tried** a casino for the first time in my life. It was wonderful, and I won money. Newcomers are lucky - that's what people say in Russia.

This autumn, I'm going to New York with my friend. I would like**** to find friends from New York to speak English with. Thanks.

*the original sentence made sense - I've just shifted it to sound more natural.

**for mentioning a past action, you usually use past simple (I visited), not past perfect (I have visited).

***even though you still love the country, you would use past tense to describe that feeling while talking about visiting America in the past.

**** "I'll be glad" makes sense, but we wouldn't use 'glad' in this context.