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Test practice for IELTS General writing Hi, could you correct this notebook if you do not mind? Especially, if I use some impolite word, please let me know. Thank you in advance! Task: You see the above advertisement for a course designed to help improve your memory. Write a letter to the organisers of the course. Answer: Dear sir or madam, Hi, my name is Mao. I would like to do this amazing course for my business. Currently, I am working as HR manager for one small IT company, and dealing with various tasks: hiring people, calculating salary for workers, contacting our business partners, and so on. There is, however, one big problem. My task is so called "multi-task", and I have to take care of a lot of tasks which have something to do with a wide range of departments, so sometimes I forget to do some of them. I hope this Memory Course will resolve my problem. By the way, I would like to ask about your course. How do we improve our memory in just 10 weeks? Or, do we have to prepare something for this course? Then, Could you tell me about course fees and dates? Since I am a little busy, I may need to adjust mt schedule for this course, although weekends are basically good for me. Kind regards, Mao

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Test practice for IELTS General writing

Hi, could you correct this notebook if you do not mind? Especially, if I used an impolite word, please let me know. Thank you in advance!

Task: You see the above advertisement for a course designed to help improve your memory. Write a letter to the organisers of the course.

Answer:
Dear Sir or Madam,

Hi, my name is Mao. I would like to /do/take this /amazing??/ course for my business. Currently, I work as a HR manager for a small IT company, and /I deal with/I am responsible for/ various tasks: hiring people, calculating salary for workers, contacting our business partners, and so on. There is, however, one big problem. /My task is so called/I must/ "multi-task", and I have to take care of a lot of tasks (which have something to do with a wide range of departments), so sometimes I forget to do some of them. I hope this Memory Course will resolve my problem.

By the way, /I would like to ask about your course/I have some questions/. How do we improve our memory in just 10 weeks? Or, do we have to prepare anything for this course? Then, /could you tell me about/what are the/ course fees and dates? Since I am a little busy, I may need to adjust my schedule for this course, although weekends are usually good for me.

Kind regards,
Mao

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