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The story of nine-colors deer Long long time ago, on the uninhabited desert, the Persian merchant’s camel team lost their way due to sandstorm, suddenly a nine-colors deer appeared to point the direction to go away. The nine-colors deer happily lived with animals in the deep forest. One day, The nine-colors deer hears someone call to help. When the nine-colors deer runs there and sees a snake-man who inadvertently falling into the water when he collecting medicine. The nine-colors deer immediately save the snake-man on land. The snake-man totally was appreciated at the deer saved his life. And the deer just asked the snake-man don’t tell anybody about saw him in the forest. The snake man made a promise and swear to the God. The Persian businessmen came to the place and told the king about the adventure in the desert. Who know that the queen insisted on skin of the nine-colors deer’s to make clothes for her. And she dreamed about she dressed this clothes. The king had no choice and offer a huge reward to the whole country if someone caught the nine-colors deer. When the snake-man saw that, he told the king and led the army toward the forest. The snake-man set the trap and pretended to fall water again, the nine-colors deer save him immediately. But when the deer run toward the snake-man, the soldiers waiting at the water’s edge shot the deer with thousand arrows. Suddenly the deer was shining all over the body, the arrows turned into ashes. The deer revealed to the king that the snake-man was ugly, and the king was deeply disturbed. The snake-man was scared and then retreated, fell into the deep water and drowned. The nine-color deer flied away. The wicked finally got the punishment he deserved.

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The Story of the Nine-colors Deer   [In the main title always capitalize the first, last, and all important words.]

A long, long time ago, on an** uninhabited desert, a* Persian merchant’s camel team lost their way due to sandstorm, suddenly a nine-colors deer appeared to point the direction to get away.

The nine-colors deer happily lived with animals in the deep forest. One day, The nine-colors deer hears someone call for help. When the nine-colors deer runs there he sees a snake-man inadvertently falling into the water when he is collecting medicine. The nine-colors deer immediately saves the snake-man by pulling him on land. The snake-man totally appreciated that the deer saved his life. And the deer just asked the snake-man to not tell anybody about seeing him in the forest. The snake man made a promise and swore to God.

The Persian businessmen came to the place and told the king about the adventure in the desert. Who knew that the queen would insist on having the skin of the nine-colors deer to make clothes for her. And she dreamed about herself dressed in these clothes. The king had no choice and offered a huge reward to the whole country if someone caught the nine-colors deer. When the snake-man saw that, he spoke to the king and led the army toward the forest. The snake-man set a* trap and pretended to fall into water again, and the nine-colors deer saved him immediately. But when the deer ran toward the snake-man, the soldiers waiting at the water’s edge shot the deer with a thousand arrows. Suddenly the deer was shining all over its body, and the arrows turned into ashes. The deer revealed to the king that the snake-man was ugly[bad?], and the king was deeply disturbed. The snake-man was scared and then retreated and fell into the deep water and drowned. The nine-colors deer flew away.

The wicked finally got the punishment he deserved.

[* Only use "the" (a definite article) if the subject is well-known to the reader/listener or has already been mentioned in your text. Otherwise, use an indefinite article, such as "a" or "an". Example: I have a plant in my living room and I water the plant every day.]

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