Self-Introduction
我的名字叫Alice。 我的专业是国际学。我想当图书管理员。
我出生在美国。我是一名大四的学生。
我是一九九七年出生的。
我的爱好是看书。我在图书馆工作所以我常常去图书馆看书。我现在看一个很好看的书， 名字叫＂Illuminae。＂
我要学中文因为我要去中国看我家。他们不会说英文；他们会说广东话和普通话。 我可以懂一点儿广东话但是我不会说广东话。 所以我要学普通话，跟他们说普通话。
我毕业以后想旅行。我想去台湾，日本，韩国，加拿大, 和欧洲. 我不要住在加州因为加州太热了, 所以我想住在欧洲。我喜欢下雨。
My name is Alice. My major is International Studies. I want to be a librarian.
I was born in America. I am in my 4th year of college.
I was born in 1997.
My hobby is reading books. I work in a library so I often go to the library to read books. I am currently reading a very good book, its name is "Illuminae."
I want to learn Chinese because I want to go to China to meet my family. They do not speak English; they can speak Cantonese and Mandarin. I can understand a little Cantonese but I cannot speak Cantonese. Therefore I want to learn Mandarin to converse with them.
After graduation, I want to travel. I want to go to Taiwan, Japan, Korea, Canada, and Europe. I do not want to live in California because it is too hot, so I want to live in Europe. I like the rain.
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Self-Introduction
我的名字叫Alice。 我的专业是国际学。我想当图书管理员。我出生在美国。我是一名大四的学生。
我是一九九七年出生的。
我的爱好是看书。我在图书馆工作所以我常常去图书馆看书。我现在看一个很好看的书， 名字叫＂Illuminae。＂
我要学中文因为我要去中国看我的家人。他们不会说英文；他们会说广东话和普通话。 我可以懂能听懂一点儿广东话但是我不会说广东话。 所以我要学普通话，能跟他们说普通话。
我毕业以后想去旅行。我想去台湾，日本，韩国，加拿大, 和欧洲. 我不要想住在加州因为加州太热了, 所以我想住在欧洲。因为我喜欢下雨。
My name is Alice. My major is International Studies. I want to be a librarian.
I was born in America. I am in my 4th year of college.
I was born in 1997.
My hobby is reading books. I work in a library so I often go to the library to read books. I am currently reading a very good book, its name is "Illuminae."
I want to learn Chinese because I want to go to China to meet my family. They do not speak English; they can speak Cantonese and Mandarin. I can understand a little Cantonese but I cannot speak Cantonese. Therefore I want to learn Mandarin to converse with them.
After graduation, I want to travel. I want to go to Taiwan, Japan, Korea, Canada, and Europe. I do not want to live in California because it is too hot, so I want to live in Europe. I like the rain.
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确实写的不错，继续加油！几个小的修改建议。
Self-Introduction
我的名字叫Alice。 我的专业是国际学。我想当图书管理员。我出生在美国。我是一名大四的学生。
我是一九九七年出生的。
我的爱好是看书。我在图书馆工作所以我常常去图书馆看书。我正在看一本很好看的书， 名字叫＂Illuminae＂ 。
我要学中文因为我要去中国和我家人团聚。他们不会说英文，他们会说广东话和普通话。 我可以懂一点儿广东话但是我不会说广东话。 所以我要学普通话以便能跟他们交流。
我毕业以后想旅行。我想去台湾，日本，韩国，加拿大, 和欧洲. 我不想住在加州因为加州太热了, 所以我想住在欧洲。我喜欢下雨。
My name is Alice. My major is International Studies. I want to be a librarian.
I was born in America. I am in my 4th year of college.
I was born in 1997.
My hobby is reading books. I work in a library so I often go to the library to read books. I am currently reading a very good book, its name is "Illuminae."
I want to learn Chinese because I want to go to China to meet my family. They do not speak English; they can speak Cantonese and Mandarin. I can understand a little Cantonese but I cannot speak Mandarin. Therefore I want to learn Mandarin to converse with them.
After graduation, I want to travel. I want to go to Taiwan, Japan, Korea, Canada, and Europe. I do not want to live in California because it is too hot, so I want to live in Europe. I like the rain.
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有些地方需要注意标点符号的使用呢。逗号或者句号，都会影响你想表达的意思。
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一点也不！谢谢!
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你的汉语真的很好
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