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Essay #215 "Overweight" 20.08.18 Despite the fact that overweight is not a problem exclusively of our age, over recent decades the number of overweight people has increased drastically. Thus, many people express concern about it and sometimes they compare it to an epidemic. I will try to explain the reasons behind this and possible ways to solve it below. One of the main reasons that this happens is the great shift in our lifestyle. Nowadays most jobs are sedentary and do not involve any physical activity. So people have no opportunity to burn calories at work, and attending a gym after work is quite tedious and requires great commitment. Also, with the fast-paced lives they lead, people just have no time to control their diet and to follow a more balanced one. This also contributes to weight gain and an overall worsening of health. Basically, to solve the problem people just have to deal with these causes. First, people whose job does not require any physical activity should start to attend a gym or a pool, or maybe find some active hobby. Even dancing would be very beneficial. It will not only help them to lose weight, but also make their lives more diverse. At the same time people should follow a healthy diet. This does not mean that people should make themselves starve, but a simple change such as removing fast-food from their diet will provide great results. To conclude, in recent decades overweight has become one of the most common health problems, but it can be solved with the application of healthy diets and exercises. In many cases people just do not put enough effort into it, and this is very dangerous as overweight can cause many serious problems with their health in the future. Thus, with commitment and desire, people can change the situation and not only lose weight but also make their lives more diverse and interesting.

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Despite the fact that overweight is not the problem exclusively of our age, but over recent decades the number of overweight people has increased drastically. 

When you say "despite the fact", the reader automatically waits for a contrary argument, but you used a "but" (also implying diversion) to introduce a complementary idea.

Also, "obesity" sounds a lot better than overweight in your first sentence, IMO.

Maybe:
Obesity is not an exclusive problem of our age. Over the decades, the number of overweight...

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Essay #215 "Overweight" 20.08.18

Despite the fact that overweight is not a problem exclusively of our age, over recent decades the number of overweight people has increased drastically. Thus, many people express concern about it and sometimes they compare it to an epidemic. I will try to explain the reasons behind this and possible ways to solve it below.

One of the main reasons that this happens is the great shift in our lifestyle.  Nowadays most jobs are sedentary and do not involve any physical activity. So people have no opportunity to burn calories at work, and attending a gym after work is quite tedious and requires great commitment. Also, with the fast-paced lives they lead, people just have no time to control their diet and to follow a more balanced one. This also contributes to weight gain and an overall worsening of health.

Basically, to solve the problem people just have to deal with these causes. First, people whose job does not require any physical activity should start to attend a gym or a pool, or maybe find some active hobby. Even dancing would be very beneficial. It will not only help them to lose weight, but also make their lives more diverse. At the same time people should follow a healthy diet. This does not mean that people should make themselves starve, but a simple change such as removing fast-food from their diet will provide great results.

To conclude, in recent decades overweight has become one of the most common health problems, but it can be solved with the application of healthy diets and exercises. In many cases people just do not put enough effort into it, and this is very dangerous as overweight can cause many serious problems with their health in the future. Thus, with commitment and desire, people can change the situation and not only lose weight but also make their lives more diverse and interesting.
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Essay #215 "Overweight" 20.08.18

Despite the fact that being overweight is not a problem exclusively of our time but of recent decades, the number of overweight people has increased drastically. Thus, many people express concern about this and sometimes they compare it with an epidemic. I will try to explain the reasons behind it and possible ways to solve it below.

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A boy was so fat he couldn't get out of his house. "Oh, I wish I was as light as a mouse," he often said. His mother complained, but it was all in vain. He couldn't loose weight, even though he never ate. One night he dreamt he was a tiny as a mouse. Waking up, he saw his house from above. Wow! He had turned into a dove.

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