(IELTS) Academic Task 1 - Government Expenditure in UAE
Note: I'm not sure if it's necessary to include the actual figure in billion AED as I did. Please advise.
The graph illustrates the budget allocation details of the UAE government in 2000. According to the data, the primary focus of UAE expenditure 18 years ago was on social security, followed by health and education.
It is immediately apparent that social security by far accounted for the highest proportion, at nearly a third (100 billion AED) of the total budget expense. The second highest, namely health and personal services, was only invested with half the amount spent on social security at roughly 15% (53 billion AED), followed closely by education at 12% (38 billion AED). The government planned to utilize 7% (23 billion AED) of its total expenditure to pay off debt interest, and a similar amount was also allocated to national defense. The amount of spending was slightly lower when it came to law and housing heritage, both comprised of around 5% of the whole budget (17 billion and 15 billion AED respectively). At the bottom, the remaining 15% was distributed to the last three categories: industry (13 billion AED), transport (9 billion AED) and other expenditure (23 billion).
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(IELTS) Academic Task 1 - Government Expenditure in the UAE
Note: I'm not sure if it's necessary to include the actual figure in billion AED as I did. Please advise. [Yes, it is important to include the actual numbers in your text. Just giving percentages is weak.]The graph illustrates the budget allocation details of the United Arab Emirates (UAE)* government in 2000. According to the data, the primary focus of UAE expenditure 18 years ago was on social security, followed by health and education.
It is immediately apparent that social security by far accounted for the highest proportion, at nearly a third (100 billion AED) of the total budget expense. The second highest, namely health and personal services, was only invested with half the amount spent on social security at roughly 15% (53 billion AED), followed closely by education at 12% (38 billion AED). The government utilized** 7% (23 billion AED) of its total expenditure to pay off debt interest, and a similar amount was also allocated to national defense. The amount of spending was slightly lower when it came to law and order and the housing heritage and environment, both comprised of around 5% of the whole budget (17 billion and 15 billion AED respectively). At the bottom, the remaining 15% was distributed to the last three categories: industry (13 billion AED), transport (9 billion AED) and other expenditure (23 billion).
[* It is good to somewhere write out the complete name of the country. This could be done in your title or here in the body of your text where you first use the abbreviation.
** You can't say the government planned to use this amount because you don't know what was planned versus what was actually spent. The only data the chart provides is what was actually spent, not what was planned to be spent.]
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