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Chinese Valentine's Day- Qixi Festival Could you please help me to correct this short essay? Thank you very much! It is Qixi Festival in five days. Qixi is on 7, July by lunar calendar. It will be on 17, August by Solar calendar this year. It is also called Chinese Valentine's Day by Chinese young people. Qixi originates from a romantic fairy tale. Long long ago, a beautiful fairy named Zhinv falled in love with a ordinary man who was called Niulang. However, parents of Zhinv very opposed them to be a couple. The queen mother prohibited her daughter Zhinv to meet with Niulang. Zhinv lived in deep affliction with Niulang, as well as Niulang. Zhinv's siblings symathize with them very much, so they begged the queen mother overlook those two fateful lovers. Finally, the queen mother allowed Zhinv to meet Niulang one time in on 7, July each year. There would have one brige which made by magpies for Niulang and Zhinv meeting. Even though they only have one day to be together, they still love each other so much until now! It was also called Qiqiao Festival or Daughter's day In the ancient China. At Qixi/Qiqiao, young girl will send one embroidery such as a fine sachet to a boy to show her love. If the boy also has same feeling to her, he would accept her gift. If not, he would refuse her politely. Nowadays, lovers also show their love to each other in Qixi. Nevertheless, something are changing unknowingly. such as the gift change to Money, we call it "Hongbao-red envelope". some girls will ask her boyfriend a big Hongbao in wechat. Wechat is a social app which could send money to your friend by electronic payment. The sum is from ¥520 to ¥1314, maybe more! girls show the numbers to the Moments to show off to their followers. I very dislike this way to celebrate a pure lover's day! Why can't we follow the example of ancient people? Anyway, happy Qixi Festival! and, you are lucky boy if you are a single man, cause you don't need to pay for your love. If you really love a girl secretly, buy a gift or you make a little stuff by yourself as a gift to her, It will be more touching!

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Chinese Valentine's Day- Qixi Festival

Could you please help me to correct this short essay? Thank you very much!

The Qixi Festival is in five days. Qixi is on the 7th of July by the lunar calendar. It will be on the 17th of August by the Solar calendar this year. Qixi is also called the Chinese Valentine's Day by Chinese young people. Qixi originates from a romantic fairy tale. Long long ago, a beautiful fairy named Zhinv fell in love with an ordinary man who was called Niulang. However, Zhinv's parents were very opposed to them being a couple. The queen mother prohibited her daughter Zhinv to meet with Niulang. Zhinv lived in deep affliction with Niulang, as well as Niulang. Zhinv's siblings symathized with them very much, so they begged the queen mother to overlook those two fateful lovers. Finally, the queen mother allowed Zhinv to meet Niulang one time in on July 7th each year. There would be a bridge  made by magpies for Niulang and Zhinv's meeting. Even though they only have one day to be together, they still love each other so much until now! This festival was also called the Qiqiao Festival or Daughter's day In ancient China.

At Qixi/Qiqiao, young girls send an embroidered item such as a fine sachet to a boy to show her love. If the boy has same feelings for  her, he accepts her gift. If not, he will refuse her politely. Nowadays, lovers also show their love to each other in Qixi. Nevertheless, the ritual is changing unknowingly. For instance the gift has changed to money, we call it "Hongbao-red envelope". Some girls will ask their boyfriends for a big Hongbao in wechat. Wechat is a social app by which you can send money to your friend by electronic payment. The sum is from ¥520 to ¥1314, maybe more! Girls show the numbers to the Moments to show off to their followers. I very much dislike this way to celebrate a pure lover's day! Why can't we follow the example of ancient people? 

Anyway, happy Qixi Festival! and, you are a lucky boy if you are a single man, because you don't need to pay for your love. If you really love a girl secretly, buy a gift or make her something as a gift to her, It will be more touching!

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