Correct my mistakes please
Gaining the nerve to talk to him, I finally crossed the road
She might stretch the truth a bit to avoid a punishment
The deciding factor if she goes or not to the party will be her behavior at grandparent’s house
To back up a bit that wasn’t about his homicide, it was rather about repercussions what he just did
When I came home I saw my parents huddling around the fireplace
I found him arrogance but still nice and brave guy
Suddenly Harry had the sick feeling in the pit of his stomach. He might be expelled in a couple of hours
Some of her classmates held her up for ridicule since she could remember herself
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Correct my mistakes please
Gaining the nerve to talk to him, I finally crossed the roadShe might stretch the truth a bit to avoid a punishment
The deciding factor if she goes or not (the not is implied because of the word if) to the party will be her behavior at her grandparent’s house
To back up a bit that wasn’t about his homicide (not sure if homicide is the word you meant here), it was rather about the repercussions of what he just did
When I came home I saw my parents huddling around the fireplace
I found him arrogantce but still nice and brave guy
Suddenly Harry had the a sick feeling in the pit of his stomach. He might be expelled in a couple of hours
Some of her classmates held her up for ridiculed her since she could remember herself
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Correct my mistakes please
Gaining the nerve to talk to him, I finally crossed the roadShe might stretch the truth a bit to avoid a punishment
The deciding factor if she goes or not to the party will be her behavior at grandparent’s house
To back up a bit that wasn’t about his homicide, it was rather about repercussions what he just did (Sorry, this is not clear.)
When I came home I saw my parents huddling around the fireplace
I found him arrogance but still nice and brave guy
Suddenly Harry had the sick feeling in the pit of his stomach. He might be expelled in a couple of hours
Some of her classmates held her up for ridicule since she could remember herself (this part is hard to understand.)
Very good writing! I have rewritten some of the sentences exactly how I would say it in a conversational tone.
Getting up the nerve to talk to him, I finally crossed the road.
She might stretch the truth a bit to avoid punishment. If you are talking about her possible future behavior:
She may stretch the truth to avoid punishment. If you are warning someone about her possible future behavior:
She is capable of stretching the truth to avoid punishment If you are commenting on her character:
Her behavior at her grandparents' house will determine whether or not she gets to go to the party.
When I came home, I saw my parents huddled around the fireplace. (huddling is not wrong, but it sounds like they were starting to huddle when you walked in the door. Huddled means they moved to the fireplace before you got there.)
I found him a bit arrogant, but still a nice and courageous guy.
Suddenly Harry had a sick feeling in the pit of his stomach. In a couple of hours he might be expelled.
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