Are people addicted to electronics ?
This picture is showing that people are focused too much on their tv’s, computers and electronic stuff and they don’t see surrounded world. They don’t notice changes in the world like when winter starts. I don’t watch cartoons but I used to watch it when I was young and I was addicted to watching it. There will be a lot of new technological developments in our homes over the next thirty years. A robots that will do everything for you will be launched. They will clean house for you or do breakfast.
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Dear Kristian,
You have had two corrections already, which cover most of the grammar, sentence structure errors. I thought it maybe useful for you to see how re-ordering the paragraphs may enhance this piece of work to tell the story, I think you are trying to tell:
When I was much younger, I used to watch cartoons, I don’t watch them now, but at that time, I was addicted to them.
This picture is showing that now, people are too focused on their TV’s, computers and electronic gadgets. They don’t see their surroundings, they don’t even notice changes in the world, like when the winter starts.
There will be a lot of new technological developments in our homes over the next thirty years. Robots will be launched, that will do everything for you. They will clean house for you or do breakfast.
In thirty years time, what will happen to us?
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This picture is showing that people are focused too much on their tvs, computers and electronic stuff and they don’t see the surrounding world. They don’t notice changes in the world like when winter starts. I don’t watch cartoons but I used to watch them when I was young, I was addicted to them. There will be a lot of new technological developments in our homes over the next thirty years. Robots that will do everything for you will be launched. They will clean house for you or make breakfast.
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Are people addicted to electronics ?
This picture is shows that people are focused too much on their tv’s, computers and electronic devices and they don’t see surrounded the world around them. They don’t notice changes in the world like when winter starts. I don’t watch cartoons but I used to watch them when I was young and I was addicted to watching them. There will be a lot of new technological developments in our homes over the next thirty years. A Robots that will do everything for you will be launched. They will clean your house for you or make breakfast.0
This picture is showing that people are focused too much on their tvs, computers and electronic stuff and they don’t see the surrounding world. They don’t notice changes in the world like when winter starts. I don’t watch cartoons but I used to watch them when I was young, I was addicted to them. There will be a lot of new technological developments in our homes over the next thirty years. Robots that will do everything for you will be launched. They will clean house for you or make breakfast.
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