Is it necessary to work hard everyday?
In my opinion, being rich has a lot of benefits, but, has it worth to work all the day for becoming rich?
Some people spend a lot of time in order to have a good salary and buy a lot of valuable things which make them happy Regardless of hurting themselves.
Many people are involved with overweight which is harmful to the body. according to many investigates and research, overweight may affect a human soul. A person needs to walk or talk to another one periodically, otherwise, he/she will be depressed.
Research shows that mental health problems come from loneliness. It means we need to have communication with others.
In my point of view, humans are like a computer. They need to pass their prerequisites in order to be healthy. If you didn't sleep, you would sleep more in the future in order to compensate for the body's need.
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Is it necessary to work hard everyday?
In my opinion, being rich has a lot of benefits, but, but has is it worth it to work all the day for becoming to become rich?Some people spend a lot of time in order to have make a good salary and buy a lot of valuable things which make them happy regardless of those items hurting them themselves.
Many people are involved with overweight, which is harmful to the body. According to many investigates and research, being overweight may affect a human soul the person's emotional life. A person needs to walk or talk to another one periodically, otherwise, he/she will be depressed.
Research shows that some mental health problems come from loneliness. It This means we need to have communication with others.
In my point of view, humans are like a computer. They need to pass their prerequisites satisfy their human needs in order to be healthy. If you didn't sleep, you would will need to sleep more in the future in order to compensate for the your body's needs.
I will continue my essay next time.
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