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Diversification source of energy It is commonly known that countries sector of energy depends almost entirely on the coal. There has been a significant amount of research into these subject over the last few years which suggests that sources of coal in our country are still decreasing and will finish in the 30 years. It shows that dependence on the one source of energy may have a negative impact on industry and economy. It seems to be obvious that some serious steps must be taken into this subject to solve the problem as fast as it is possible. There is a widely held view that alternative sources of energy have a positive impact on the environment and the economy. On the other hand, the country must spend more money to encourage citizens to invest in this kind of new technology. The solar energy can be a very useful solution for each household however it depends entirely on the weather. As we know in the winter this solution can be unreliable because we have many days without sun. Accurately predicting the future is practically impossible to do however it seems to be obvious that some changes must be taken to exchange a coal as a basic source of energy. The government should anticipate new trends in energy's development and a new approach to the above problem must be his priority. One of the most noticeable examples, in this case, can be a nuclear energy. It may be very effective and reliable. Most of the European countries use nuclear plants and invest in the technology. In the past, we tried to build this plant but in the aftermath of Czarnobyl disaster, those plans have been abandoned. However, nowadays security measures are holding at the high level so the risk of the catastrophe seems to be little.

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Diversification source of energy

It is commonly known that many countries sectors of energy depends almost entirely on the coal. There has been a significant amount of research into these this subject over the last few years which suggests that sources of coal in our country are still decreasing and will finish in the next 30 years. It shows that dependence on the one source of energy may have a negative impact on industry and economy. It seems to be obvious that some serious steps must be taken into this subject to solve the problem as fast quickly as it is possible.
There is a widely held view that alternative sources of energy have a positive impact on the environment and the economy. On the other hand, the country must spend more money to encourage citizens to invest in this kind of new technology. The s Solar energy can be a very useful solution for each household, however it depends entirely on the weather. As we know in the winter this solution can be unreliable because we have many days without sun.
Accurately predicting the future is practically impossible, to do however it seems to be obvious that some changes must be taken to exchange a coal as a basic source of energy. The government should anticipate new trends in energy's development and a new approach to the above problem must be his their priority. One of the most noticeable examples, in this case, can be a nuclear energy. It may be very effective and reliable. Most of the European countries use nuclear plants and invest in the this technology. In the past, we tried to build this a plant but in the aftermath of Czarnobyl disaster, those plans have been abandoned. However, nowadays security measures are holding at the a higher level so the risk of the a catastrophe seems to be lower little.



This is an excellent piece of work. However, you need to be careful using articles (a,an, the) and perhaps revise countable and uncountable nouns to improve your written accuracy.


Lucy

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Sorry for my words being not really suitable! I am really into sustainable development and diversification of energy sources is an essential part of it, so I just couldn't pass by :)
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Thank you Aysa. I agree with you although my main purpose was increasing vocabulary and writing skills. By the way, your examples were very useful for my report. Regards.
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Yes, nuclear plants are really efficient, however even 1% risk is too high because with modern commonly used nuslear fuel any risk will lead to dramatic consequences. That's why the use of nuclear energy is so restricted. Howeer, green sources of energy, like solar, wind, tidal energy should be implemented too. Nuclear plants require expensive and massive infrastructure, while renewable energy stations are more mobile and can be built near the cities and houses. That's why energy will not get lost while tranferring to consumers. And renewable energy have unlimited and eco-friendly "fuel", while nuclear energy faces the problem of waste disposal.

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