Please help me with my 250 word essay!
Here is the topic:
Many people suppose that boys and girls should be separately educated.
Do you agree or disagree?
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Please correct and paraphrase whatever can be paraphrased to be better.
Thank you so much.
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This is my writing:
In traditional societies, there were loads of single-sex schools where only boys or girls studied together. In the contemporary scenario, people still encourage this form of education to which I strongly object, despite valid arguments on the contrary, because of two following reasons.
Initially, how do people get along well with members of the opposite sex without any experiences of gender? A school is a society in miniature in which students learn to manage on complicated circumstances happening in real life. This means that in this early stage, if they are not well-prepared for such situations, they may fail to deal with things taking place in the rest of their life.
Additionally, schools impart not only expertise knowledge but also skills which are acquired from activities and interactions that both boys and girls take part in. Our society consists of male and female genders, therefore the way we separate and train them distinctly sounds unnatural at all. Recent researchers showed that students trained in single-sex schools interact less productively as well as flexibly than those in mixed schools.
Some parents still do not want their children to be in mixed schools or classrooms, for at certain ages they can be distracted from the opposite sex. Of course, this is true. One day students in single-sex schools will definitely live and work side-by-side with members of the other sex, educating them that way limits their ability to work cooperatively and co-exist successfully together.
In short, from the two points of view above, I am against the idea that parents should send their children to single-sex schools or classrooms. Moreover, authorities should have certain actions to recommend that children should be in mixed schools, otherwise being educated in single-sex schools will absolutely be an obstacle to their future life.
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In traditional societies, there are many single-sex schools where boys and girls study separately. In contemporary society, this style of education continues to be encouraged. Despite valid arguments for single-sex schools, I strongly object, for the following reasons.
First, how can people get along with members of the opposite sex, without experiencing gender differences at school. A school is a miniature society in which students learn to manage complex real-life circumstances. If children are not prepared for the everyday experiences of male and female relationships, during their school years, it is possible they will fail to deal with them later in life.
Second, schools impart skills and knowledge on their students, which are acquired from activities and interactions that both boys and girls participate. Our society consists of male and female genders, making their separation at school distinctly unnatural. Recent research shows that students from single-sex schools interact less productively, and flexibly, than their peers from co-ed schools.
Many parents choose to send their children to single-sex schools to eliminate the distraction of the opposite sex. This is not effective. Students from single-sex schools will one day live and work side by side with members of the opposite sex, and educating them in an environment that doesn’t reflect this limits their ability to work cooperatively and co-exist successfully.
In short, based on the two points mentioned above, It is my view that children should not be sent to single-sex schools or classrooms. I also believe that authorities should have the power to enforce co-ed schools. If not, education at single-sex schools will be a large obstacle for their future success.
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