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A part of my English paper about French and Chinese families, thanks!
2. Family structure2.1 Evolution of Chinese family structure
Chinese people value family and kinship. However*, in the past 100 years, the family structure in China has undergone great changes. The Chinese traditional family refers to the family of three generations or four generations. This kind of family was** male-centered: grandfather, father, son, grandson, uncle and uncle and their children and grandchildren. A large family could consist of dozens or hundreds of people***. They lived together, and all of their property belonged to the whole family. Individuals and small families generally could not own their own property. The most powerful person in the family was often the oldest grandfather or great-grandfather. He not only decided*** on the distribution and use of property, but also other important things in the family, such as which school children and grandchildren went to, what job they did and who they married. The extended family used Confucianism to educate its children, with particular emphasis on the filial piety towards older people. According to custom, if parents died, their sons had to “show filial piety” for three years. In other words, for three years, they would have to live next to their parents’ tombs to accompany their dead relatives. As dutiful sons, during this period, they were not allowed to eat fish or meat, nor wear beautiful clothes. They were not allowed to live in comfortable houses, nor to get married. Living in such a big family, the relationships between people were very complicated. The lives of individuals, especially young people, were very constrained. However, the extended family also guaranteed (safeguarded, perhaps? or "took care of"?) the lives of its members. People did not need to worry about illness or unemployment. In the history of China, there have been many large families with hundreds or thousands of members. These large families often made up an entire village, with the same surname. The most powerful person in the family was the patriarch. People in the same family shared a common ancestor and used genealogy to write down the names of each generation in the family and the important family members. In other words, if a person had some special achievement, his deeds would be written on the genealogy. This would not only bring honor to ancestors, but also make the whole family feel proud. This traditional extended family has existed in China for thousands of years.
Very well written. Of course ignore these suggestions if you like: there are very few mistakes in your original. Take care to keep consistent verb tenses. You might want to review "may", "might" and "could".
* You could consider, for flow, moving your "however" to after your " .. past hundred years,"
** Do be careful with tense consistency. Are you writing about the traditional family in the present, or in the past? I suppose that is both a style choice and a function of whether the traditional family as described is still found.
** Your version was not wrong, although I would have preferred it with "could" for "may". In writing English, as you know, you are looking for flow and idiom which feel natural for an English speaker, rather than word-for-word or concept-for-concept replacement of another language.
https://learnenglish.britishcouncil.org/en/english-grammar/certain-probable-or-possible
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