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Tale - Recognized Dedication This is just a fictitious text, I would like you to correct it and to give me some tips. Thank you in advance! John always wakes up early to go to the office, he works in a Fabric Industry located in the municipality of Toritama, in the state of Pernambuco – Brazil. He holds a position of production manager, and is usually the responsable of the oppening of the Industry, so he isn’t allowed to be late. He lives near the Industry, like the majority of employees, because it is a small city. One day in the month of November, John got up earlier than he’s habituated, due to his problem of light sleep. He listened to a loud crash in the direction of the Industry. Worried about the noise, he got dressed very quickly and walked in the direction of the Industry. When he got there, he found a big hole in the metalic fence of the entry. Inside his work place, he found everything messy, turned down. Some of the fabric was brunning, and the safe box in the administration’s office was violated. He was desperate, in less than one month they would probably have made millions of dollars with that clothes’ collection. He waited the cops, and talked about everything we knew and saw. In the same week John started planning an atack plan to recover the maximum of profit he could. He started a management method that consist in quick meetings in the start of shifts with all sector managers to establish achievables goals, until reaching the larger goal. John succeeded making a good profit in the month of December. The owner of the Industry made a big end of year meeting, to announce a new oppening of an Industry in another city called Santa Cruz do Capibaribe, located in the same state. The Industry would produce to a new fabric mall, called Moda Center Santa Cruz. The investors stipulated a profit of billons of dollars per year. Guess who will be the director of this new unit?

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Tale - Recognized Dedication

This is just a fictitious text, I would like you to correct it and to give me some tips. Thank you in advance!


John always wakes up early to go to his office, he works in the Fabric Industry located in the municipality of Toritama, in the state of Pernambuco – Brazil. He holds the position of production manager, and is usually the responsible for the oppening of the Industry, so he isn’t allowed to be late. He lives near the Industry, like the majority of employees, because it is a small city.

One day in the month of November, John got up earlier than usual, due to his problems sleeping. He listened to a loud crash in the direction of the Industry. Worried about the noise, he got dressed very quickly and walked in the direction of the Industry. When he got there, he found a big hole in the metallic entry fence of the entry.

Inside his work place, he found everything messy and turned upside down. Some of the fabric was burning, and the safe box in the administration’s office was damaged (or missing?). He was desperate, in less than one month they would probably have made millions of dollars with that clothes’ collection.

He waited for the cops, and told them everything he knew and saw. In the same week, John started making a planning an atack plan to recover the most profit that he could. He started a management method that consisted in quick meetings at the start of each shifts with all of the sector managers to establish achievable s goals, until reaching the larger goal.

John succeeded in making a good profit in the month of December. The owner of the Industry made a big end of year meeting, to announce the new oppening of an Industry in another city called Santa Cruz do Capibaribe, located in the same state. The Industry would produce to a new fabric mall, called Moda Center Santa Cruz. The investors stipulated a profit of billions of dollars per year. Guess who will be the director of this new unit?
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Tale - Recognized Dedication  (British English might use the spelling "Recognised")

This is just a fictitious text. I would like you to correct it and to give me some tips. Thank you in advance!
(For your "a fictitious text" it might be better to us "a fictional text", or even just "fiction")

John always wakes up early to go to the office. He works in a textiles factory located in the municipality of Toritama, in the state of Pernambuco, Brazil. He holds a position of production manager, and is usually the responsible for the opening of the factory, so he isn’t allowed to be late. He lives near the factory, like the majority of employees, because it is a small city.

One day in the month of November, John got up earlier than usual, because he had slept badly.   He heard a loud crash from the direction of the factory. Worried about the noise, he got dressed very quickly and walked towards the factory. When he got there, he found a big hole in the metal fence at the entrance.

Inside (his workplace), he found everything messy, turned upside down. Some of the material was burning, and the safe in the administration office had been broken into. He was desperate. In less than a month they would probably have made millions of dollars with (or "from") that clothes collection.

He waited for the cops, and told them about everything he knew and had seen. In the same week, John started making a plan  to recover as much profit as he could. He introduced a management method that consisted of short meetings with all sector managers at the start of each shift, to establish achievable goals, until they could reach their overall target.

John succeeded in making a good profit in the month of December. The owner of the factory held a big end of year meeting, to announce the opening of a new factory in another city. Santa Cruz do Capibaribe, located in the same state. The factory would supply a new fabric outlet, to be called Moda Center Santa Cruz. The investors stipulated a profit of billons of dollars per year. Guess who will be the director of this new unit?

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