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Alcohol and teenagers, is there a solution? We are living in a society where information makes us closer than ever. We can show to all our friends or anybody who is surfing on the internet what we are doing at the moment, and of course, this has made all the problems of our society are more visible than ever. Alcohol, in teenagers, is one of them, nowadays, we are alarmed around this issue, but it is true that in our society teenagers have always been drinking alcohol, but as I said with new technologies is more visible. The big question on this subject is why teenagers are drinking alcohol, and it is the same reason at any time because they think drinking alcohol is cool. We have to abroad this topic from the secondary schools to destroy the strong beliefs we have around alcohol like it is not bad for health or it is less damaging than other drugs. In conclusion, if we want to find a solution to this issue in a long-term, the only way is through education.

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Alcohol and teenagers, is there a solution?

We are living in a society where information makes us closer than ever. We can show to all our friends or anybody who is surfing on the internet what we are doing at the moment, and of course, this has made all the problems of our society are more visible than ever.

Alcohol abuse  in among teenagers is one of them. Nowadays we are alarmed around concerned about this issue, but it is true (better: we should consider) that in our society teenagers have always been drinking alcohol. but as I said, though, with new Technologies this is more visible.

The big question on this subject is why teenagers are drinking alcohol, and it is the same reason at any time (not very clear)because they think drinking alcohol is cool. We have to abroad address this topic from the secondary schools in order  to destroy the strong beliefs we have around alcohol, like that it is not bad for health or that it is less damaging than other drugs.

In conclusion, if we want to find a solution to this issue in a long-term (a long term solution to this issue) the only way is through education.


Since you are expressing your personal opinion, you could include in the text some expressions such as "in my opinion...", "I think...". Good job!





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