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IELTS essay In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? The developing of internet technologies changes the way of read or watch news. The young people read only news that interest them and doesn’t need to buy newspapers or spend much their time waiting the anchor speaks. Moreover, the young people doesn't watch tv very much because are often busy outside home. The newspapers are designed for adult target people, containing too much advertising and are uncomfortable, too big to take and read. Young people are moving away from publishing printed because through the internet connection of their smartphone , they find all the information they need in an instant. Reading a newspaper is possible also online but its price is too high and uncomfortable. In my opinion, the risks of reading online the news ,searching by search engine, is read a fake news. In addition, the information found through an instant search by smartphone, doesn’t remain fixed in mind for a long time because they think there is the smartphone always to help them. The development of a compact newspaper may be a starting solution to increase the sales. Another possible solution may be decreasing the price of online newspaper. To fight the fake news and consequently increase the sales of newspapers and the share of newscast, may be the making awareness again the fake news, to publicizing the reliability of newspaper and newcast

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IELTS essay

In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
The development of internet technologies has changed the way of reading or watching news.
The Young people only read news that interests them and do not (try not to use contractions in an IELTS essay) need to buy newspapers or spend too much of their time waiting for the news anchor to speak.
Moreover, the young people do not watch tv very much because they are often busy outside their homes.
The newspapers are designed for an adult target audience, containing too much advertising and are uncomfortable, too big to carry/hold and read.
Young people are moving away from printed publications because through the internet connection of their smartphone, they are able to find all the information they need in an instant.
Reading a newspaper is also possible online but its price is too high and uncomfortable (to read?).
In my opinion, the risks of reading the news online , or searching by search engine, is reading a fake news. In addition, the information found through an instant search by smartphone, does not remain fixed in the mind for a long time because people think there is the smartphone is always there to help them.
The development of a compact newspaper may be an initial solution to increase the sales. Another possible solution may be decreasing the price of online newspapers. To fight the fake news and consequently increase the sales of newspapers and the share of newscast, may be the raising awareness again of the fake news, to publicizing the reliability of newspapers and newcasts


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