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Please correct my essay:) I agree that personal finance should be taught in school. I have two reasons I have to support this argument are a lack of financial knowledge and the need for financial responsibility.

Learning about it at home is necessary. However, not all parents have financial management skills. Fundamental knowledge, such as cash outflow, should be taught in school.

I have met a lot of people who can not manage their personal finances. Whenever they have money, they go out for gambling or buying cigarette and alcohol immediately. They have a lack of financial responsibility. We have to learn that we can spend money up to income.

After I had started my worker life, I realized that earning money is very hard. Therefore, I want children to know how important spending money is.

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I agree that personal finance should be taught in school. I have two reasons I have to support this argument. The first is a lack of financial knowledge and the second, the need for financial responsibility.

Learning about it at home is necessary. However, not all parents have financial management skills.

The fundamentals of financial management, such as cash outflow, should be taught in school.

I have met a lot of people who cannot manage their personal finances.

Whenever they have money, they go out for gambling or  immediately buying cigarettes and alcohol immediately. 

They have a lack of financial responsibility. We have to learn that we cannot spend all of our money.

After I had started to work worker life, I realized that earning money is very hard. Therefore, I want children to know how important spending money is.

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I agree that personal finance should be taught in school. I have two reasons I have to support this argument : are a lack of financial knowledge and the need for financial responsibility.

Learning about it personal finance at home is necessary. However, not all parents have possess financial management skills. Fundamental knowledge, such as cash outflow, should be taught in school.

I have met a lot of people who can not cannot manage their personal finances. Whenever they have money, they go out for spend it on gambling or immediately buying cigarettes and alcohol immediately. They have a lack of financial responsibility. We have to learn that we can spend money up to income. cannot spend more than our income.

After I had started my worker life joining the workforce, I realized that earning money is very hard. Therefore, I want children to know how important spending managing their money is.

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