Talk about my trip to America
Hi guys! I am from China. My English name is Kyle. Tomorrow is my 18 birthday. I have learnt English for 12 years ,maybe. But I only got one chance to talk with native speakers in my life. In 2015,I got to NYC to take part in a summer camp about basketball. And I stayed there for 1 month.It was a perfect experience.The city was very large.And the building was tall.People there looked very busy.It had high technology.
But I think the US express is very very slow.I bought something from Amazon,and it took about half month! In China,if u buy something online,it just take about 2-3 days maybe. And the food there ,I think it was unhealthy.It had too much fried food!I think it tastes delicious but it is really unhealthy.
In 2015,I am a introverted boy .So even though I got a good chance to communicate with English native speakers,but i missed it. When I finished my university entrance exam,I will go to America again.I think the best way to improve your language is communicating with a native speaker.
Do u want to help me with English?If u are interested in Chinese,let me help u!
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Talk about my trip to America
Hi guys! I am from China. My English name is Kyle. Tomorrow is my 18 birthday. I have learnt English for 12 years, maybe. But I've only got had one chance to talk with native speakers in my life. In 2015, I got went to NYC to take part in a summer camp about basketball. And I stayed there for 1 month. It was a perfect experience. The city was very large. And the buildings was were tall. People there looked very busy. It had high advanced technology.But I think the US express is very very slow. I bought something from Amazon, and it took about half month! In China, if u you buy something online, it just take about 2-3 days maybe. And the food there, I think it was unhealthy. It had There was too much fried food! I think it tastes delicious but it is really unhealthy.
In 2015, I was an introverted boy. So even though I got had a good chance to communicate with English native speakers, but I missed it. When I finished my university entrance exam, I will go to America again. I think the best way to improve your language is by communicating with a native speaker.
Do u want to help me with English? If you are interested in Chinese, let me help you!
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Glad you enjoyed your trip to America, 战翕峣cn! :)
Just a few tips for your writing:
Whenever you use punctuation marks like "," or "." you must put a space after them, before you start the next word.
You understand how to use the article "a". (For example: "I boarded a plane to America"). But when the next word begins with a vowel (a, e, i, o, u), you must use "an" instead. (For example, "An apple", not "a apple").
Using "u" to mean "you" is very very informal. When you're talking to friends, its alright. But make sure you don't use it in any formal situations like talking to employers.
When you said "The building was tall", you're speaking in singular form. Meaning, "This one building was tall". To speak about many buildings, you must use the plural form "The buildings were tall".
The word "finished" is past tense. You would use it when you're talking about something you have already completed. "I have just finished eating", vs "I will finish eating soon".
Well written! Good luck with your University entrance exam! :)
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Talk about my trip to America
Hi guys! I am from China. My English name is Kyle. Tomorrow is my 18th birthday. I have studied English for about 12 years ,maybe. But I only have had one chance to talk with a native speaker in my life. In 2015, I got to NYC to take part in a summer camp about basketball. And I stayed there for 1 month. It was a perfect experience.The city was very large and the buildings were tall. People there looked very busy. It had very advanced technology.But I think US shipping is very very slow. I bought something from Amazon, and it took about half a month to arrive! In China, if you buy something online, it only takes about 2-3 days maybe. And the food there, I also think the food there was unhealthy. It had There was too much fried food! I think it tastes delicious but it is really unhealthy.
In 2015, I was an introverted boy (you can also say "I was a shy person" -- it is a little more kind) so even though I had a good chance to communicate with native English native speakers, I missed it. When I finish my university entrance exam, I will go to America again. I think the best way to improve your language is communicating with a native speaker.
Do you want to help me with English? If you are interested in Chinese, let me help you!
Very good work, your written English is very good!
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